All Comments on 'The Unknown Lord Pt. 03'

There comes a point where the number of spelling issues begins to spoil a story. You have a big problem with homonyms, for example you confuse day of the 'week' with 'weak' and feeble - sometimes the errors don't matter, and sometimes they do, in which case the brain spins off trying to decode exactly what you are trying to say. Profit and prophet is another one. There are more. It's an interesting story but the effect of the editing issues is that readers will give up on you as the chapters progress.

along with the misused words you also forget who is doing what within the next 5 words.you cant have sheila riding your dick with sheila licking your nut sack at the same time,and when did chaste become shasta?

Yes you made some mistakes but for the love of god ignore these other comments.

I thought it was a great story good characters great plot I actually want more maybe a pillow up when they reach for the stars and fight the machines please continue this story I loved it thank you

awww come on man you have to do more of this story it cant end like this on a cliff hanger

Still love this story and I’m still waiting for more chapter please I’ll beg if it helps.

what the hell you can do more so please do more of this story i loved reading it