All Comments on 'The Waitress Next Door Pt. 02'

Premise still OK.

But sex it much too automatic. Too mechanical.

Lacks preliminaries/foreplay.

And you need an editor/proofreader.

For example, you wrote:

"A divorcée huh." DIVORCEE (with the accent) is a woman. DIVORCE (with the accent) is a man.

You weote MASTERBATE. It's MASTURBATE.

Four stars.

Fair story, though a little naïve in approach. To many errors for a good read - your readers stop at each one to check meaning and the flow is lost. I’ll add you’re / your to the list.

Can't wait for part 3

WOW!!!!

I thought the story was great, and I can't wait for part 3.

Definitely FIVE stars

PS. I am somehow surprised by some of the harsh comments. I am certainly not reading this for grammar perfection. I am reading it to get a certain reaction, and this story definitely delivered on that, as with the other stories I read from this author... I would definitely recommend them

Hope you're still planning to continue this

Also hoping this story continues