by Antonio_y_Cleopatra
Just please look up the conjugations of the word "lay"...
The misuse breaks the narrative flow.
But don't stop writing.
Including Kelly were good. The spanking and Cathy fucking Brad were a turn off.
Female domination is really not my cup of tea. Didn't understand the angle of Kelly as a character in the story. She's been along the other two all the way. Then suddenly she's pulled out. It all felt out of place.