All Comments on 'The Wedding Pt. 02'

Lisa and Artie sizzled together! No description nor detail lacking anywhere that I could see. It's clear Lisa really wanted him, and she's different from other ladies in that she let him really admire her naked; carnally, they're a great match from this chapter.

Only faux-pas I noticed (very minor) was "expostulated," which would be better as "exclaimed" or even "ejaculated" (much older English usage, around time of "Tale of Two Cities").

It surprised me he figured out her code, since he was taken to task for not knowing all the hand signals (thanks for explaining them, by the way). What kind of make me laugh and shocked me at the same time was "I don't want to hear you plopping turds." Is that really sister talk? Some of these characters are quite brutal with their remarks to each other! I would really imagine Nicole was listening in on their copulating and will give Lisa grief in the next chapter. Of course, I could be wrong! :p

A very steamy 5!