All Comments on 'The Witching Hour'

It was on ok story. Plenty of Typos. I would recommend an editor. About the Story, i would prefer a little more buildup and longer scenes.

The beginning of a Hot Throuple !!

Excellent start.

Very, very good for a first story! Writing better than most.

Truly a great read. Very erotic.

i'd encourage you to write Sarah's point of view as a woman. As is, it is as if Sarah were a man in a woman's body.

Very erotic. Can't wait for another Halloween party to see how these 3 experiment further into their threeesome.

Great descriptive story. I would love to see more from this author.

Delightful even for someone who is not really into Halloween.

The story is decent but the writing is horrible. There are people offering to edit. Please consider this.

It beats bobbing for apples, that's for sure!

A few jarring errors that editing software or an editor would solve; it's not that easy to pick them up yourself sometimes. However, not enough to really detract from a sexy Halloween story.

Typos yes, but still a fantastic arousing tale. Great description & scenes. Easily pictured. Keep it up. You'll get there.

Good job. Check for typos next story. Flows well not disjointed. Sexy and tantalizing. Need more stories from you!