All Comments on 'The Woman on the Bus'

It could have been a good first story if it had some meat to it instead of nothing more than lustful horniness. If you're going to write a story provide some background and believability. Better luck in the future.

I loved the story, but agree with Anonymous - the story needs more meat. 5 stars and fave, none-the-less.

Good first story!

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Very nice first story!