All Comments on 'The Zip Files Bk. 01: Zip Unzips Ch. 06'

Interested in seeing where this is going, particularly how the competition for dominance plays out (I'm pretty sure from your comments and other work I know where the endgame is, but the how is going to be interesting).

POV sections for secondary characters are cool, they provide more context for reaction shots in the main narrative, so keep doing them when it seems appropriate.

@Shilton_Lineker: Glad to hear you liked spending a little time following Denise around. Overall I think this chapter could have been tighter but I absolutely did not want to give up that bit; probably should have splurged less on description of Zip's neighborhood and such. Ah well. The next chapter just dropped as of the time I submitted this, so I won't comment too much on how their relationship - since you can just go ahead and read ahead yourself now. Hope it turns out to your satisfaction!