All Comments on 'Third Born'

I didn't think I'd like this type of story. I was wrong; I'm hooked. You've painted a good picture. Your descriptions and character's feelings are well portrayed. I can picture the scene and I can feel the atmosphere. Can't wait for more.

That was a good one, neon.

You caught the horror, and the hope, of our distant past so well.

I liked this story a lot.

Nice to see the story fleshed out. Good job. :)

An iteresting story. I like the concept and finish.

Your story, Third Born, was very interesting. If there is a sequel, I'd be very happy to read it :).

I'd like to see more of this storyline.

Just when I thought, we had lost our focus of a well presented and descriptive story, a fresh breath of wind

arrives. Great work neonlyte.

A beautiful story, Neon. The sadness was a pleasure to read. You did a great job with this one. It even had me cry a little.

As always, an interesting, imaginative read. Keep up the good work, Neon.

Rumple

Awfully grim though, and I feel like I've got to stand up for our ancestors. We know that Cro-Magnon weren't like this, nor were Neanderthals, who buried their dead children with flowers and cared for their old and injured. So who are these people?

Well, anyhow... The writing's very nice. Good job of story telling.

The cave-man defender comment below. I forgot to log in.

--dr.M.

Loved the way you developed the tribal, feral nature and the lack of dialogue heightened the animalistic passion.

The sadness and fear were almost palpable. Great read! More please!

...clan of the cave bear. Interesting read, babe. More in the future? ~Minx

wow gripping tale I enjoyed very much, a very mystic and nature filled <grin> awesome pen-man-ship, very well done, thanks and good luck

I like your style. I was transported into another world - a brutal world, but a real world.

Hey it's wonderful, please continue on this story line. Thanks