All Comments on 'Third Girl'

Absolutely hilarious — alliterations memorable.

Brilliant. Your prose is fantastic. Give us more stories.

Even wilder than the plot is the language of the narrator (Jasmine) and her pal Trish. There's a manic inventiveness to the language that can make a reader's head spin. And if you like stories about well-bred young ladies with good manners and polite speech ... well, perhaps something by Jane Austen would be a better choice. Somehow, "Third Girl" stops short of actual obscenity, but not by much. By the end I was feeling dizzy ... but I do like the story a lot.

It makes your head spin even more if you read her other stuff and learn she chose this idiom for artistic expression. She changes her language faster than I change my underwear.

DAMN the haters on this site for downvoting this story. WTF?

Don't be discouraged -- PLEASE write more stories.

BTW I love your poetry (now that I've read it)! You could have a career as a lyricist for Cardi B.

This was one of the few times I was aroused and laughing my ass off at the same time. Thank you

Serious stars sincerely surrendered for the great alliteration in the tag line. Stan Lee would be proud.

Fun and sexy little piece. Good job.