All Comments on 'This is not a Love Story Ch. 09'

You’ve done a fabulous job of developing, and growing these characters, the cuckhold aspect, you just introduced cheapened/ruined the story for me. Mark, and Denise have a nice push, pull going, Denise needs to dominate, Mark indulges her, to a certain point, without sacrificing his integrity, or self respect. I’ve enjoyed reading about this journey of discovery these two have been on, and there is so much more of their story to tell. Please don’t ruin this lovely story by turning it into some kind of cuckfest, or having the MCs having sex with everyone in the story. There are so many other avenues you can go down to keep this story interesting and dramatic. Thank you for the time and effort. KS

Hi KS, thank you for reading and your honest comment. It's been a challenge, but I hope I've managed to keep the integrity of the story line intact untill the end. I'm preparing the next chapters for publication and I hope you'll read them and enjoy them. Rgds jasnaw

On your wedding night one of her old boy friends tell you are lucky and how good she is in bed. You look down and thank him.

She tells you how long you friend cock is then measures yours and says something like oh my, you are tiny and then asks you to get her dildo for her, the one you bought her for when you are on night shift. You get up and give it to her and dribble your cum as she climaxes.

After working out of town for 2 weeks you think you are going get lucky. She tells you about her needs and your friends fulfilling them. You tell her she deserves to have whomever she wants. She teaches you to be her jerk boy and you thank her and tell her it feels good. And it does feel good. You know you love a dom

I find the series is interesting, but the whole thing is starting to feel like an insel's wet dream, i.e. an guy who has no experience at all with women. (Oh, and I say this as a man with ... um ... "decades" of experience with women. ;-) )

Would be nice to see this kind of story from a true, dominant woman's perspective. Most of the stuff here on literotica is so shallow, narcissistic , one-dimensional, flat out unrealistic, that I just have to go "ehh" (upchuck), and move on. There's just more to human beings and their love and sexual experiences, than many of the authors seem to understand.

I keep reading, though, because every once in a while, I come across a gem that rings true, is interesting, that holds my attention, that stimulates fantasy. This story was getting close, but has kind of diverted. I mean really, a mob mother setting up her daughter for a gangbang, so she can cuck her jealous fiance? And the mob dad who tried to kill the fiance, has no idea ? Now, that's something I'm certain happens every day, right? Plot twists are interesting, but keep it real, ok?

Hi Anonymous, thank you for reading and your comment. These comments are helpful to me. The cuckolding scene is added for two reasons: I needed to have something like this to get back to in a later chapter (not published yet) and I wanted to add such a scene with a different point of view than you can usually read on Lit. I hope you'll read and enjoy the next chapters. Rgds jasnaw

Мне нравилась история, но теперь бросаю. Такой поворот разрушил всё. Если бы парень был изначально куколд, то было бы нормально. Но он дико ревнивый, да ещё и с травмой измены!! И на его глазах это происходит? Слишком искусственно и неправдоподобно. Без этого было бы лучше. Это могло бы быть нормой с Габриэль и ее нижним, но не с Марком

@Odess83, so you did read the rest of the story. I hope you liked it! Rgds jasnaw

Уважаемый автор, в каком мире любящая девушка хочет причинить боль своему парню и хочет чтобы он кричал и плакал громче? И ее это радует!!

А про вторую часть главы и говорить бессмысленно! Осуществить самый страшный кошмар, вместо того, чтобы наоборот найти способ уверить в своей любви и верности? Да ещё и рассказать про это всем друзьям и семье?

Почему то мне кажется что вы женщина, и так видите идеальную семью сегодня. Куколд и унижающая его девушка. Которая потом ещё и с радостью доставляет ему ещё большую физическую и эмоциональную боль.

Да я дочитал до конца и считаю, что конец показывает что парень полностью сломался и перестал быть мужчиной во всех смыслах этого слова. Я про классический смысл конечно, а не современное понятие

Ridiculous.