All Comments on 'Those Eyes Ch. 04'

Hey guys!

This chapter certainly didn't turn out how I wanted it. Once I submitted it, I kept thinking of all these things that I should have changed and added. Maybe I'll submit it again. I guess I felt bad that I had waited so long to upload another chapter and I wanted to get you guys something. I realize now that I shouldn't have uploaded anything that I wasn't completely proud of. So, please bear with me. I've already made a lot of progress on chapter five and it's already a lot more interesting than this one haha. Again, My apology for submitting something that wasn't my best.

I need more. I love your story

It was nice to get background information on Santana.Good chapter.

well worth the wait!

Loved the Twilight reference.lol....Look forward to the next chapter.

Hi, it actually just went out today! I Hope you enjoy :)

That was hilarious i only read twilight none of the rest but when discussing the book with my friends we all commented on Edward sparkling in the sun Lol

That's right I've made it half way and can't stop. Going to chapter 5 right now!!!

Your story is great. Sit back. close your eyes relax. Now let your story write it's self. Yes it can do that. What your think you want the story to go, might not be the way the story wants to go. Clear ?? sqhead 70 yr old Retired Nilitary

I am coming to like this tale more as I read it, but it reminds me of making homemade pasta sauce with fresh ingredients from the garden. You slowly integrate different spices and textures at intervals creating another flavor level. This story is like the characters; warm, spicy and enveloping. Yes (some tweaking needed) but damn good!!

The interaction between Lex and Ana is different from other Vamp tales. It really does leave you wanting to read on. Mission accomplished, I am hooked!!!

You need an editor. Great imagination and flow. As an example, apart as used several times should have been "a part". However, I am hooked! Imagination still trumps grammar. Doctime

Four chapters in and decided I just had to give a thumbs up comment so this story might make its way back to light for others to enjoy.