All Comments on 'Three Square Meals Ch. 048'

patiently waiting for the yellow N

... Irillith really should have sent Edraele a summary of the most important footage, with battle scenes and discussions, after action debriefings, and all the goodies to be found aboard the Invictus along with Dana's technical improvements that make them even better, ... send this data to her mother, encoded, while still in Maliri space, .... so, if something happened to her, then her Matriarch (mother) would not be left completely ignorant, ... anyway, that is my nit all picked, .... ;-) ttfn

Irillith, the Bitch, the killer (de-res) of the little purple sprites, actually is attracted to John, the evil Mael'nerak, .... how about that! ;-) ttfn

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

*Dana says, and I quote, 'I don't want that crazy bitch on my ship!'

It’s taking longer to read the comments than it does to read the story…that’s incredible!

I have to assume Tefler is leaving bits out of this chapter (like the fact that the crew has been watching Irilleth the whole time, they know what she’s watching, etc.) - time will tell (and since I’m so far behind I get to read the next chapters immediately, so I’ll find out tonight if I’m right). I do wish I had been here for the discussions y’all got to have when the story was first published - I’ve learned a lot about physics and lasers and the laws of nature!

I know Irillith is intelligent but surely they would keep tabs on her which currently yhey don't seem to be doing. Suspicions should be raised aster the AI attack on the battleship. Will she be next crew member.

Still a solid 5

Still not sure why would you Not keep under surveillance, unless it its trap to catcher why give her real info. but I love this stary.

If they manage to get some various Maliri food ingredients, The crew should politely ask Irillith for a little mealtime help... and why wasn't she more afraid of being poisoned by her food on the Invictus? ;-) TTFN

I'm amazed that nobody has thought to check if Irillith has done anything bad. I mean they were told she is an expert hacker.

When you are reading a story for the first time, the comments help you judge the story.

When you're reading a story like this for the Nth time, the comments help you judge the commenters :D

It's hilarious when people second-guess an author like Tefler....

It would be wonderful if,.. This sexy space opera was made into a television series,.. late at night, adults only, and most likely on a premium channel (if only they have the stones to put up the big money for it to be done right). You already have several years (seasons) worth of story for their script writers to screw up (hopefully not, but,..), so you must maintain some creative control. Ahh, what a sweet dream that would be! TTFN

I keep wandering how this story would look as a TV series.

gonna have to echo @taco1085. If @Tefler wants feedback on his style, I think he would prefer it constructive. I am totally enjoying the story and am grateful for the work and effort it took to create.

I read the chapter and then the comments and it is so funny. people its a story, read it and enjoy it.... this is an amazing story by an amazing writer.... enjoy it and accept it for what it is a scifi work of art and the people in the story are just that amazing creations.... and characters to a well planned story.... cant wait for more... thanks Mr. T....

"but please stop making the plotting easier by making your characters stupid."

I didn't.

You'll need to wait until the end of chapter 53 to fully understand what's happening.

It's hard to keep interested in your story when your characters alternate between being brilliant and dumb as a bunch of rocks. Their encounter with the Maliri, John, who is supposedly a VERY experienced combat veteran saying,

"You just nearly got us killed, but you've got a great ass and pretty eyes, so when you tell me it was a misunderstanding, well gosh, I've just got to believe you, and by the way, I'll assume your cold, cruel daughter won't try anything suspicious while you're on my ship." It's just too far fetched. I know you're already 50 chapters ahead of this note, but please stop making the plotting easier by making your characters stupid. It ruins the rest of your efforts, regardless of how high your faithful rate you.

All those animals, but no bird? Or Dino?!

"Unfortunately the sex had continued unabated..."

So unfortunate... what does she expect from being a character on Literotica? If she didn't want to be in a story with so much sex, she should have gone to a story on a different site.

" ...and as most of the dialogue seemed to occur in a post-orgasmic haze, she had forced herself to watch dozens of hours of them rutting like animals."

Heh, poor baby. I love how she's solving the quandary she represents through her own wickedness. The quandary is of course how does John get the vicious and bitchy sexy blue girl converted into a "good girl" without becoming the bad guy and forcing her to submit unwillingly?

Suspect that Irillith and what she eventually brings with her will become a highlight of this epic.

For chapter 63 you should put that johns mother is in a t-fed cryo pod on a prison planet

You'll need to keep going until chapter 53 to find out what's happening. ;-)

that the apparent naivete of John and the crew concerning Irillith, since they know what a conniving bitch she is, seems a contrivance of the author to keep the reader in suspense. The first time I read this story, some months ago, I started to lose interest. The next few chapters seemed to go downhill and I finally stopped reading it. I only recently came back to the story and will attempt to read through to the current chapter. There are several disturbing elements introduced to the story that made me stop enjoying reading it. John's episodes as a Progenitor, when he treats his women like shit, really made it difficult for me to continue reading.

Having said that, the first 45 chapters were very enjoyable reading. It's a shame to see the story go in this direction.

Its really disappointing to see them completely oblivious of Irillith while they already know that she cannot be trusted. I guess we will see where it goes.

Thanks! It worked.

change the URL for this story from 48 to 49, deleting the ?page=5 element and you'll be able to see the story. Lit officially ticks over at around 2:30am est but the stories are live as early as 1am est

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Chapter 49 is now available.

Hope you enjoy it! :-)

xnxx's story site is completely unusable though. So poorly designed. Lit is normally 48 hours but this has been dragging on a bit as did the one before it. I'm just concerned that someone with a bone to pick as managed to get into a mod position just to block this story.

Have you thought of posting to stories.xnxx.com. they usually offer faster postings generally within 48 hours

Just be cool.

no response so far.

"I had the same posting issue--submitted last Saturday and it hasn't posted and didn't have a post date. I queried today and Laurel said submissions are running late because of weekend systems problems. My story now has a "tomorrow" posting date on it."

I'd guess Friday for chapter 49.

Some comments remind me of that song by Queen,"I want it all, and I want it now".lol.

Chill out about chapter 49. It being late means that we'll get chapter 50 almost immediately afterwards.

If chapter 49 is so late that Teffler finishes chapter 51, then we get three chapters in quick succession. Regardless of this little moderation hiccup, we still get the finish line at the same time.

A resubmit would put it back of the queue.

Patience is useful.

Whoa..Lit is indeed testing our patience. Tefler, you're doing an amazing job with this storyline and like all others here I've been enamored by the thrills n scenes you've put up..helped put some color in the vacuum of space.

We now have a weekly addiction..N need our fix soon. If Lit doesn't bother to post it by tomorrow, would you mind re-submitting Ch. 49, am afraid that we might have to wait a bit longer but will at least get to see the light of a half century being scored. Guess it's Lit. who is tensed approaching a milestone. Lol..!

Thanks - Neil

i really like sol's features: font, night theme, word wrap

still no chap 49, funny i tht i made a prev comment but can't find it now.

Literotica is the best so, no options to change to.

But if a story starts getting flames then they really do not want to see a lot of chapters coming out fast. That makes too much work. That means they have to slow it down so it doesn't break the system.

It is on us, not the Literotica gurus.

This is the best site. Deal with it and behave.

I suspect that flags on comments put the story in a senior administrator attention queue and they will get to it someday.

Yet another reason to get along with each other here. If you don't, the chapter updates become eventual.

I'd never even noticed that SOL has a forum! I just took a look and it is slightly dead. This one chapter has had more discussion than the entire last month of the entire Story Discussion section.

We'd have to create a new thread every chapter or two... Then the mods would probably hate us, but otherwise how would we find the start of the each new chapter in a thread a thousand posts long. It would kinda suck to lose the community that has grown up at the end of each chapter.

your story keeps me happy even on my worst days thank you tefler

Have you looked into posting on another website as well?

Stories On Line posts stories the day they are submitted.Comments however are only permitted in the forums.

Either Lit's Staff sucks or there is a problem! Hmmmmm?!!!!!

I've messaged the site owners to ask if they can look into it. 50 is done, but I won't submit that until 49 is through the first round of moderation. I don't want the chapters to get released out of sequence.

Tefler

4 more stories trickled in over the course of the day, 7 more at this update. You may want to reach out to someone and see what's going on Tefler. This is a bit ridiculous

My bet is that the next chapter hasnt been moderated yet because the literotica staff are all playing pokemon.

Keep in mind that John was not aware that a null zone was cast, or for that matter that both were "spirit walking". When Alyssa collapsed she was in no real danger, and John had no clue why she collapsed.

Alyssa was knocked out.

John goes Progenitor shows up. Edraele was a very bad girl.

She was even helpless. He could have made her give them everything thwy asked for.

is chap 49, submitted 4d ago ...

Yeah, sure I'd be happy to do that. Some of my inspirations for the aliens you might find amusing. I mentioned about 20 chapters ago that I sketched the Invictus, but I decided not to share that in the end. I'm a semi-passable artist, but anything I draw isn't going to look as good as you might imagine it.

I thought I might do a long Q&A about the story at the end, where I can finally answer any questions without worrying about spoilers. Assuming anyone's still following it by then! :-)

I thought about asking but figured someone else would and you didn't need lots of people asking about it.

Concerning the character database, Tefler: you obviously have a good idea how you think these characters should be visualized, I was wondering, (AFTER the story is finished, lol) if you could provide some rough sketches or in-depth descriptions for rendering?

seriously will help out later on. I think ur missing the trader species who are psionic too... The ones who call alyssa bright one, i'll look up the name later... 2 runins with them. (u can create a sort of species of secondary imp database if u don't wanna add to main ones)

now all we need is an animator/designer/arts student with some time on their hands... thought I'd float the idea...

-devil

The next chapter hasn't entered the moderation queue yet, the link (http://www.literotica.com/s/three-square-meals-ch-49) says "page not found" instead of "it's pending moderation". Once it enters the queue, somebody tends to approve the chapters in the next 24 hours, and then it will sit there until 5:00 UTC when all new approved chapters get published.

This chapter is sitting in some inbox somewhere, so it seems this it will be delayed at least until Thursday. :(

Thanks to everyone for helping to make this list. Now it will be easier to associate the name of alien race with it's involvement in the story.

Races Database:

Name - brief description | advanced technological features | advanced biological features:

Terrain - humans | ships with large hulls | advanced breeding (fast growing population)

Ashanath - grey small humanoids | power cores | telepathy

Drakkar - big, mean humanoids with four arms | advanced armor | two of each organ

Kirrix - insectoids | neutron beams | their eggs require living organisms to eat their way out of

Kintark - lizards | plasma weapons and heat sinks | advanced genetic body modifications

Fulmanax - mushrooms with hooks | - | all specimen are controlled by a single mastermind

Maliri - skinny blue tall humanoids | advanced lasers | genetically modified by progenitors, mostly females

Ship upgrade status:

0. Terrain - a ship with a large hull (done)

1. Ashanath - reactor\generator (done)

2. Maliri - lasers (in progress)

3. Trankarans - engine (current quest)

4. Brimorian - shields (planned)

If we get three chapters showing up it will all work out as far as us addicts... I mean readers are concerned.

As long as you are writing and post them, we can't complain is all I mean. Not that we ever would, being typical internet citizens.

I guess they got flooded with new stories over the 4th July holiday and it's taking a while to clear the backlog?

Chapter 49 is showing as pending moderation in my story list. The word is in blue, which means I can click on the entry and make changes (which would put it at the back of the pending list, so I won't do that!). Once a story has been through moderation, then that link greys out, and the chapter goes live the next day.

Unfortunately that means it will be at least 2 more days before the next chapter is up on the site.

:-(

The good news is that I've finished the first round of editing on chapter 50. It's the biggest chapter yet, and is a nice milestone for 50 chapters of this story. I enjoyed writing it, so hopefully you guys will enjoy reading it too!

Have you heard anything Tefler? Stories are still getting posted, albeit at a slower rate than normal.

Tx Tall Tales has a post in his Bio dated June 30th talking about how he isn't posting on lit due to self appointed arbiters, " I have some issues with what's going on with newbie self-appointed arbiters and the credence the website is giving them."

Just a bit frustrating when I know it's written, edited and submitted and it's just not showing up

Brimorian Enclave for shield tech

Kintark have plasma weapons and heat sinks

Terrans build large hulls. Most other races make fewer Battleships I think and no dreadnoughts. Singularity cannons also appear to be humans only. Those would be one of the reasons for huge hills.

The Kirrix are the insectoids and they use neutron beams.

The Ashanath have the Faster Than Light engines of the highest quality. Their power cores are several generations better and smaller so that the Invictus was able to fit a powerful Battleship power core.

Maliri are the best laser technology but seem to possibly have some computer and AI advantages.

Trankarans have powerful engines and maybe gyros and inertia dampers to keep the people in the ship from going splat against the walls when they are hit full acceleration.

The Brimorian shields are their fame and are probably high recharge rate. I expect they will also provide personal shields for the armour suits.

"It has bothered me some time now that allysas's telepathic ability to read minds seems to have mystriousily disappeared"

Her being able to read other people's thoughts (aside from her shipmates), only kicks in under certain circumstances.

"Dana is way to tech savvy"

The earlier comments address this pretty thoroughly. Have a read through those for more info. :-)

It has bothered me some time now that allysas's telepathic ability to read minds seems to have mystriousily disappeared and everyone seems to be just drifting along without a clue also, Dana is way to tech savvy to have any body causaully tramping through her system

While we wait for ch. 49, could someone (not Tefler - he is busy) help me make the list of races with their | brief description | advanced technological features | advanced biological features.

So far we had:

Terrain - people | no special technology | advanced breeding (fast growing population)

Ashanath - grey small humanoids | advanced reactor\generator technology | telepathy

Drakkar - big, mean humanoids with four arms | advanced armor | two of each organ

(forgot the name) - insects | advanced armor | their eggs require living organisms to eat their way out of

Kintark - lizards | - | advanced genetic body modifications

Fulmanax - mushrooms with hooks | - | all specimen are controlled by a single mastermind

Maliri - skinny blue tall humanoids | advanced lasers | genetically modified by progenitors, mostly females

Any corrections or additions will be greatly appreciated. Thanks in advance.

Also does anyone remember the complete ship upgrade plan?

1. Ashanath - reactor\generator

2. Maliri - lasers

3. Trankarans - engine

where next?

P.S.

@ slinkky - Thanks for the good words. I'll try not to disappoint.

@ PussyLickersRus - I haven't sent any private messages after responding to your comment. Not sure what you are referring to.

I like that idea, however it if were against only humans, she'd win hands down, no contest. If it was open to other species, then there might be a real race.

To build on the race idea, maybe it can be a special endurance race, where the race organizers provide the vehicles, only catch is that they're all junkers that are one lap away from the junkyard, and the racers have a limited amount of time to fix it up as best they can using only parts found in the aforementioned junkyard. Then they have to run it through a timed endurance race, with the first person across the finish line after the time runs out being the winner.

Would be interesting to see what Dana could pull off in that situation, using only junk parts and a limited amount of time. Might remind her a bit of Karron; help her appreciate how spoiled she is on the Invictus. Maybe they can host the race on Karron to really drive home the point? Could give the crew an excuse to go back and try looking for Alyssa's and Dana's original medical records, if any exist.

I like comments about the story in the story comments.

I had a weird idea that Jade should win a pod race in a rig that Dana soups up for her.

@Inevitable_, Sundays are frequently a speedbump.

@Xentian, True enough. No need for personal drama here.

looks like at least another 4 day wait from Lit, no idea why they're moving so slow compared to normal lately

Guys,

Tefler is writing this the way he has envisioned it. the comments are a place for readers and fans to interact with the story and its author whether it be an opinion, observation, idea or even criticism. Attacking each other does not further this story nor does it help Tefler improve his writing in any way.

It would be great if we could all just agree that we have a unique and interesting story being written then sit back and enjoy!

Cheers!

Xentian

His private messages are a bit different.

WTF? Someone on the internet accepting an unsolicited and very harsh personal criticism in a positive way? And then said, "thank you." I have never seen that before.

Despite your flaws, you have just impressed the heck out of me with your talent for self-improvement and rationality. The internet would be a better place if everyone could do that,

John has two sides.

All will make sense in the end. ;-)

Chapter 50 is done. It's 21k and with the editors.

... like some of the prior commentators I'm a bit concerned about the naivety and "fools rush in..." attitude exhibited by the protagonists (especially John himself). Seems a far cry from his cautiousness in the starting chapters.

Maybe their newfound abilities and successes have lulled them into a false sense of invincibility? I'd love to see them suffer a bit (nothing severe like deaths but something very humiliating) before they finally "wake up" and start taking their roles as galactic-destroyers-turned-to-saviours a bit more seriously.

Right now their cavalier attitude is starting to tick me off a bit.

I've been working on a character for some time, and, while the original was going to be male, I think I'd be willing to share. If you want to know more, email me at teroshin9@gmail.com

What Irrilith needs is a good load of John's cum. That would mellow her right out.

Your intentions always seemed honest. Your interest in the story is obvious. You belong here.

We have seen others with bad intentions that have no interest in the story and bullshit to honesty ratios that are disturbingly out of whack. Pure trolls. They don't belong here.

You were a little disruptive but as a guess, you were just excited. It happens to everyone and you got a double dose probably.

Relax and have fun. Enjoy the story. That is why we are all here.

It feels like the story is reaching a major milestone.

I think this must be half way to reaching the end.

Just amazing so far, and can't wait to see how it ends, even though I will miss it.

I can almost picture John settled down with baby filled beauties.

I think John needs to be himself and spend some time with Irrilith. Treat her as if she is a decent example of a female person and let her practice being one.

Peace among us.

And back to the story.

The Ashanath talk telepathic so the AI filter caught none of their work on the Invictus. Irrilith missed them in her video compilation.

Thank you for making a detailed, somewhat hurtful, yet fair assessment of my character flaws. Now that you've described it that well, I must completely agree with you. I do see all those things in me.

Special thanks for making the effort to present it in such a constructive way. Since you've made great suggestions for improving my commenting, I'll work on:

1. inquiry not criticism

2. conjectures not condemnations

3. and most of all - give up control of the story

You are correct that the comments should not be so brutal, but rather subtle and encouraging.

The other stuff about me requires some soul searching...

You wrote "We are not your therapists nor are we your inferiors". Well, you're definitely not my inferior, but are you sure about not being the therapists part?

Anyway, Thank you very much for helping me become a better person and face my demons.

You, Sir, are a good man.

Looking forward to another friendly banter with you. Hopefully about the actual story next time.

@Dry_Opinion:

regarding chapter style: You have to understand that while this is being written as a serial and as such can be frustrating after waiting a week for a chapter(and Tefler writes at an obscene pace by any standard), the story has to make sense and be comfortable when read by someone who comes years later to read it and that person will want chapters that have some slow down in it. Pacing is always important

Regarding John Fucking around: He's the military commander and CEO of their trading/PMC 1 ship setup, he reviews information, gives necessary orders, deals with morale but otherwise when not meeting people or fighting, he doesn't have much to do and if you read back through the story, never really has either. He's spent plenty of afternoon's swimming away his time with Jade or fucking one of the girls while the other girls do important work.

@ms904191

Tefler showed what every girl's, Alyssa aside, ability would be prior to them getting their enhancements. What we don't know is whether or not Irillith becomes something even more spectacular if added to the crew. Her hacking ability, at least to now seems to be use of a particular AI program, nothing more.

@PussyLickersRus:

Personal attacks aren't necessary, that's over the line.

If we can keep the comments well purposed that means Tefler should have more time for writing chapters.

Discuss the story, with every well mannered thought worth mentioning. Do not let the tone of the comments go rancid.

I do not object to anyone putting a brief lapse into text, but expect to be called on it. I would. If I feel the need to defend something that others find unnecessary I would be careful before assuming that everyone else is wrong.

You state: "Just pointing out the lack of actual work in John's daily activities compared to female personnel.

This bothers me, because I'm a male and feel bad for how my gender is represented in this chapter. Naturally, this is my personal reaction, not an attack on the story. The author has complete privilege to create unlikable traits to any character."

Okay, and I mean this from a foundation of concern: if your feelings about "being male" are so fragile that a fantasy story upsets you, then perhaps you should look at that a bit more.

Problem is: You do not present your "personal reactions" in the form of inquiry, you present them in the form of criticism, and not even constructive criticism. The very obvious base from which you comment is one of assuming you should have control over the story because it does not meet your needs for escapism. That arrogant pretense is a rather serious character flaw to which the others, and myself, on this blog are reacting when we rebuff you. Typically, that intense a level of a need to control is bedded in a lack of a good self-image. While on one level I, and it seems others, are reacting to your need to control; at a deeper level I also feel very sad for you because I understand where that comes from.

You actually come across, at least to me, as either very jealous or rather immature; using the anonymity of the internet (this blog) to express latent animosities, of which you have not appropriately dealt, from your past. I base this on the fact your comments are not positive in any way, do not offer any conjectures (only condemnations), and you justify it all with it is "my personal reaction". As if that justifies you using Tefler, this fantasy story, and this blog as your emotional trash can. News Flash: It doesn't.

We are not your therapists nor are we your inferiors. So my suggestions are simple and straight-forward.

If you are upset with the realities of a FANTASY, SCIENCE FICTION, piece of escapist literature, then please just quit reading it and save us your hubris and give us a break from your hamartia.

By the way Tefler, I love your story. I would not change a thing and have no criticisms...constructive or otherwise. Thank you for blessing us with your vision.

Thanks very much to Anonymous for posting this.

Irrilith's society appears to revolve around advanced information technology, That in turn appears to be driven by the Drow-like society it is. Each of the Great houses is spying on and backstabbing the other. Knowledge is power. So surprise, surprise they are fucking good at it.

Again I have to agree with my anonymous friend. As heir-apparent to House Valaden, Irillith would have got access to every resource and the best instructors to develop her awesome talent. If Ceraden is 300 or so years old, fair chance our blue bitch isn't far off that so yeah imagine if you had that time to practice your favourite skills.

She is as alien as the Ashanath. Excellent point. The point. Too many people are putting a Terran IT box with Terran hacking skills around Irillith.

I'm with my anonymous friend. I also appreciate a concern asked as a question instead of complaint.

Let's sit back and enjoy a great story. Nothing is accidental in Tefler's writing so I am also wondering if people are reading the same story.

Maybe my anonymous friend could make his chill pills available to a few select commentators.

Dave.

Great story five stars again. When this story is done (not to soon I hope) would really like to download the whole story to be able to read again at leisure.

Good question.

Actually most girls hinted their ability with Alyssa development of class A navigator skill being the one that seems like it developed purely from enhancement and training.

Irrilith I think is from a culture with advanced information technology, had access to every resource and instructor of the highest quality, and had awesome talent that she has developed. It is rude to talk about a woman's age but I feel like Irrilith might be 300 or so years old. Imagine if you had that much longer to practice your favourite skills.

She is as alien as the Ashanath.

I appreciate a concern asked as a question instead of complaint.

Deal with it people because Irrilith is awesome (aside from being an evil bitch which does not seem accidental to me) and I do not even feel like I am reading the same story as some of the Frowner Downer commentary contributors.

Even if I see a point in your comments, it makes me mad when it hints at complaints.

Well I am mad most of the time anyways but I take pills for that.

Ummm what I don't understand is that you showed each of the john's bonded girl's ability only after their transformation

Why show irillith's ability before ?????

The device Irillith lobbed toward Dana was the bomb control/countdown and the guidance for the grav-sled. It wasn't her hacking deck (which she hadn't brought with her on the Fulmanax mission).

"She paused and unclipped the device from her vambrace and then lobbed it carelessly in Dana's direction"

"4. Calara beat John in Judo"

So if he beat her as normal, that would count as not fucking around? That fight strengthened their relationship, which all the crew value more than anything.

He's got tech specialists working for him who provide him research Summaries to review. Being a leader and reviewing reports from your subordinates is not "fucking around" it's a vital part of being in command!

I'd strongly recommend not reading the wheel of time books. In one book, the main character, Rand, does nothing for something like 500 pages.

Just to be clear.

Everyone enjoyed the steak dinner.

Some people would have preferred French fries on the side instead of baked potato.

Is that a good analogy to the level of complaints we are seeing?

"Expecting character development for a character every chapter is entirely unrealistic, especially with an expanding cast."

In this chapter:

1. Alyssa worked on telekinesis and armor

2. Dana worked on new alloys

3. Nymph worked on shapeshifting

4. Calara beat John in Judo

5. Rachel researched the Nymph

6. John - fucked around

Just pointing out the lack of actual work in John's daily activities compared to female personnel.

This bothers me, because I'm a male and feel bad for how my gender is represented in this chapter. Naturally, this is my personal reaction, not an attack on the story. The author has complete privilege to create unlikable traits to any character.

My comment "Re: Nymph mass alteration" had a hypocritical part: "Also it is a fantasy world, so the only debatable things are characters reasoning, behavior and decisions. Everything else is author's imagination."

I apologize for it. Please ignore it.

Everything else in that comment seems fair from my point of view.

Write it how you want. I can't understand how folks can't suspend the "real" and accept the fantasy and enjoy it without having to pee on it.

For example, Hyper-warp rifle. I love it, sounds great, not gonna argue with you.

A typical .220 Swift rifle will wear itself out in as little as 1000 rounds due to the high velocity. That's a fact, but I can suspend my expertise in ballistics in order to enjoy your story. Why some of these others take you to task with every niggling detail, I can't say. You've written a beautiful story and I look forward to every chapter. Your battles, character development, twists and turns are golden. Keep it up. peace

Expecting character development for a character every chapter is entirely unrealistic, especially with an expanding cast.

In any case, there actually has been something happening with John but it's been subtle, and will only become clear as the next chapters unfold.

You're proving my original point. Which was "4. All girls are working on something interesting, while John fucks around. I am all for smart and driven beautiful women, but John's development has been obviously neglected for a couple of chapters now."

See "Uneventful for my taste" comment

> "Oh, it makes perfect sense that psionics can be used to violate the conservation of mass and energy," Is it known that psionics can do that? It seems way too blasé to me.

That is a fair point. On the other hand, Alyssa used psionic energy to change the density of ship's armor plates. Same as converting energy to mass.

From what I know, psionic energy does not exist in our reality. We should expect unexplained phenomenons, because our scientists haven't researched this type of energy. Also it is a fantasy world, so the only debatable things are characters reasoning, behavior and decisions. Everything else is author's imagination.

Sorry about that. I thought I had updated the bio page when 48 went live, but I must have forgotten. It should be up to date now.

"I agreed that he used telekinesis in progenitor state. But in half-human state he does not try it nor does he work on making it his skill. Hence, no development."

None of the crew saw him use telekinesis or pyrokinesis. Why would he randomly start trying to use those when he has no idea he is capable of it? After his attempts at telepathy were an abject failure, why would he even try telekinesis which is a more dramatic ability?

Alyssa developed telepathy first, then telekinesis later, so there seems to be logical progression to her growth in psionic ability. He fell at the first hurdle.

I think you're confusing what I let you see as a reader, with what the characters are aware of and can act on.

"He used psionic energy to kill the Fulmanax guardian AND developed telekinesis just two chapters ago."

I agreed that he used telekinesis in progenitor state. But in half-human state he does not try it nor does he work on making it his skill. Hence, no development.

Alyssa, on the other hand, is moving chairs and stuff...

"I take it you are a glass half empty kind of person?"

I'd like to consider myself a person who points out what can be done to make the glass full.

Well they did pick one up as she threw it at them after the fulamax so I guess they could just do a little looking themselves if they want too