All Comments on 'Time Never Waits Pt. 03'

Can't wait to see the next chapter as to where you take it!!!

Firstly i enjoy the story but it has some obvious flaws and downs. Mc is an asshole, has no remarkable traits, does whatever he wants.

Characters aren't built to be humans but slaves of mc, they obey him, let him whatever he want with them. They need more self awareness and emotions, not mindless dolls.

Sex scenes are short and quick, bam bam then finished. It needs some more visual descriptions, partners talking, emotions showing up.

Romance, most lacking thing in this story. Emotions like love need be built upon time and interaction but Angela came like whore but got his love out of nowhere with soul mates bullshit. He sleeps with her instead of his mother or grandmother.

It has some cuck elements which I personally don't like but they are minimal.

I hope author don't mind my long review cuz I liked the story and wanted to contribute to make it better.