All Comments on 'Time Out'

I do hope you continue this story, it's pretty good so far.

Quite interesting so far. I hope you continue!!

This has definite possibilities please continue.

Aww! I wanna read more!!

Good start

I'm interested in more o f this story.

Hai all I am going to continue the story, thanks for your support.

If anyone wants to be an editor 4 me then just tell me in the comments and we can sort something out.

- if a story gets to 4.3 on the ratings u can have my name (only my first one)

I felt a surge of disappointment as it ended so I suppose that means I wanted it to continue.

I'll add, Best of Luck (and skill) to employ the tropes of Time Stopping (and control that proffers) and remain interesting, compelling, and entertaining. A risk with writing fiction, that seems more difficult to avoid with: erotica, sexual power/control - and with the power to stop time, in particular - for some reason. Perhaps an otherwise reasonable 'Internal Editor' yells "Finally!!" and every adolescent Hope and Fury one's ever had, furiously takes over and every Hope and Sprite of vengeance tramples any of the more artful, post adolescence, skills our 'Internal Editors' have developed.

Cheers,

I would prefer releasing it after an editor had looked over it though

Definitely caught my attention. Would love to see where it goes. You have taken it a step past a lot of other Time Stopping stories. Very interesting.

Great promising start cut short before it could blossom. Loved the angles. If you decide to continue I know I'd read it and where you were headed at least one person would appreciate the effort.