by so_lovely
This was great and I'd love to have this storyline develop further. It's hot already, but could really keep going. Great writing.
Nice set-up, solid characters, realistic dialogue: I really enjoyed this. Not often I award five stars, but this deserved a top score. Do hope we get to hear more of Sal and Eddy's adventures, maybe another with Cara?
I really enjoyed this read. Entertaining and humorous, I wanted to read to the end even after I'd climaxed. :-). Great skill.
Why do you keep changing tense from past to present. It is quite off-putting. You are telling what happened not what is happening.