All Comments on 'Tonya's Unicorn Party'

Had potential but not quite there. ⭐⭐⭐

I don't understand why Bran and Jan hate her? And what for do those guys suing her for mental and emotional damages?

Pretty good complete story - 3.8*

Got to agree with Hindsight. Lot of potential to develop the sex, the humor in the chaos that erupts when husband arrives, not to mention Tonya-Michael afterwards — closing rather deflating.

Suing the for emotional damages for this? Jesus that’s dumb

Not much here

2 stars

Kinda hard to believe any lawyer would agree to represent those idiots. Also hard to believe that he would go to her hospital room for any reason — why not let his lawyer handle it? Most of all, why didn’t he call the police immediately upon seeing the drugs and hearing the many voices?

Intense!

Typical one screen crap!

They're not just suing her, but also her friends, too, probably why they hate her because it also said that Bran and Jan had husbands as well, the charges likely got back to the husbands, who became aware of what they were doing and are likely going to their own divorces. They just want to put the blame on someone else and Tonya was likely the ring leader, hence why they are mad, all of their "happy" lives are crumbling, Tonya's just crumbled harder, dur to the bodily damage she has endured.

Thanks for the read

The story had some pretty funny lines.

Gee, keep the cruise or cash it in if you can.

Sorry she got caught!

4

Good, but not great. I loved the fact that he didn't kill anyone, because the bullshit police reports would have put him in jail, and she would have gotten everything. It needs a second part, though—one where he gets a proper happy ending. Thanks for the story. The Bear liked it, a lot.

The BEAR

As others have stated, Why would the boner boys sue the women? Plus, Mike and Tonya have been married for 5 years. Why would she sign those papers while in the hospital? Her own lawyer would need to assess the content. Also, why leave in the Cruise Trip tickets? She obviously couldn't use them and he was the one who booked them so he could possibly get a refund... or use them himself. Trying to follow cliched tracks just doesn't work.

@infosauger - just a little gag I put in there at the end :) I suppose they're mad at her for getting caught, and everyone mistakenly did think Mike was going to kill them. I hope you enjoyed it otherwise!

He didn’t touch or shoot anyone. Definitely needs a second chapter. Mike deserves a better woman and the scumbag bros shouldn’t get away unscathed. They need a big lesson about other men’s wife’s and houses. A lesson that will last.

Not even close to enough!

Fairly good. Last line had me laughing.

Was this supposed to be a funny story?

????? No stars No plot No direction You need help!

What a sorry excuse... I agree with Infosauger, suing for mental and emotional damages, no way. I would have shot them all for raping my wife, even though it would not be realistic in court. Short and sweet but could have been extended and made better... 2 stars for this.

A decent story, but a lot of wasted potential.

Yeah, don't reward the cunt with a cruise.

Not much emotion from Mike after finding out his wife was a cheating slut.

We readers should sue for emotional damages.

@mndhanson017, where do you see that Bran and Jan are married?

Another "technique" story, with lots of details about when, where, and how, but essentially Nothing about Why. I get it, when, where and how are pretty easy. But Why, why has to make some sense. This wife turning into a monstrous promiscuous whore made No Sense. Thus we have another Martian Slut Ray story. Not very original, and mostly empty of anything compelling or suspenseful. Hell, the wife appears to hold him in complete contempt and disrespect, and the husband never had a clue? Yeah, just more unbelievable and unexplained crap. Better luck next story.

I'd have let her die

buying your wife tits is the first chink in the chain......if you don't think she is perfect just the way she is then don't marry her. If she keeps asking for plastic surgery after the wedding and it is not due to medical reasons or repair after a needed surgery or accident. Tell her to get them from her next husband and move on.

Never mind the cheating bitch, drinking half a bottle of Macallen 18 should have cost a couple of the boneus brothers their lives.

Slapstick and Loving Wives are two genre that don’t really go together.

Great comedy of errors , like Charlie Chaplin and Mae West at a rave.

Very funny liked it

This is how a relaxing story should be written. Well done!

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Boo

Not remotely sexy

I could see a Marx Brothers movie from this....

10 Big Blazing Stars! Excellent writing, concise, No repeats, Spelling and everything "Well Done!" Thank you for this FUN Story about an "entitled" cheating wife who fucks herself up out of her cheating and stupidity. Well Done. I really enjoyed this story. It really gave me a smile. Thanks, Buster2U

Thought that was funny. Thanks

Had potential for a nice BTB but was a dud