All Comments on 'Total Domination Pt. 01'

too short, the reader does not know who they are, what is their relationship. Your story is posted in BDSM, so are they D/s? or just a couple into kinky play.? Gave it 4*

She came without permission. I want to know what he is going to do about it. Keep writing.

I loved this. I don't care about their relationship, this was hot. Write more

Amazing start, although for future reference I advise prolonging her teasing, making her beg and plead for her pleasure. Try introducing more toys and ideas into it. Take your time and let her squirm and squeal as she burns with need. Don't spare any of the gory details.

Also, it could use more detail, describe what he/she is doing and how they are doing it. Otherwise very hot, definitely a 4-4 1/2

This literally made me wet and I can imagine being in her place. Hell I want to be in her place...please write more