All Comments on 'Tracey's Awakening'

When you're typing someone's name in dialogue, it's critical to add a comma before their proper name. Thus, you wouldn't type, "Let's eat Grandma!", because cannibalism is illegal; rather, you must type, "Let's eat, Grandma!". Here, you need to do that with all of your dialogue. Okay, now on to your next chapter to see where this is heading. Cheers!