All Comments on 'Trading Up'

Confusing as hell

Interesting spin.

4 stars

Good story!

4

Things can only get better. After reading this mess they certainly can't get any worse. I actually feel as though I need a shower to remove the crap from my mind. A detestable tale about downright hateful people. I'm off to the bathroom.

I was in a hurry. No Editors were harmed or used during the production of this story.

Yeah could’ve been a good story but no, I’m sure someone will like it

Awww poor Leslie

What a bastard

Novel plot, but out of the seven characters in it, 5 are utterly despicable, with only the receptionist and the wife's Managing Director having even a chance of being a good person. And that includes the MC.

Wow everybody cheating on everybody.

It's Soapopra Thursday!

If I were him, I would be watching for multiple knives in the back.

P.S. Never get your spouse fired BEFORE the divorce.

??? That was odd, and a bit scatter shot ???

It was good until the end. Then it became the start of a porno.

LOL! So many monkeys, so many branches.

Why hurt Leslie? I don't get it.

LJA, I have to say your story was very interesting and as you stated at the beginning it was short and very pointed. It would be nice to see this continued but I suspect that this is the end. THANKS for a very good morning story

Meh. Kinda dorky.

Oh what a tangled web

Not going to tell you what your characters are thinking. Nor am I a 'troll'. But I AM going to tell you what I think of this story you ground out in minutes. It sucked.

All the characters were worthless as human beings and the plot was thin at best. Just a guy screwing over every person around him for no reason. Whether the boss was just using him or he was hoping to trade up is unclear.

Huh?

Am I dim, but I don't see the need to get rid of Leslie.

Maybe I'm just not devious enough.

Very weird. One too many “twists” to make it enjoyable.

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3 ***

4 stars - actually, this was humorous and I liked it, although too short.

One more question for the author please. You mentioned in a comment on your excellent 5 ***** story “Promotion Question” that you were thinking about/working on a follow up. Is that still true? Sure hope so.

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Thanks!

I generally enjoy your stories. You have good story ideas but for some reason I always feel somewhat let down after reading one. Like there could have been so much more in the story.

I enjoyed the story until the comment at the end.

WAY too much serendipity in this short blast. The Leslie bit was out of left field and then having his Boss be attractive and rich and single was way over the top. Don't quit your day job.

A bit short, but I liked it...CINCO ESTRELLAS!

No build up, just ending. A twisted, confusing, implausible and funny ending. Thanks for sharing.

Gamblnluck:, You have it spot on, shallow nasty people all trying to trade up. Mind you I could have done better. dunmovyniv, Please rate the story, not the comments at the end. They are not aimed at you.

The biggest problem for me with your stories is the total lack of revenge on the assholes that seduce the wives in your stories. Not only with your stories but as of lately most LW stories. Yeah, I'm a Neanderthal that enjoys the total pain and destruction rained down on said assholes. A good beat down does wonders to an assholes prospective of married women. Sadly the writers with balls to take revenge have been replaced with pussies with man buns.

Cute!

So Leslie is daughter of a rich guy, whose brother is chasing after his wife on her orders to set wife up, and hubby doesn’t expect Leslie’s firing to blowback on him with Leslie divulging his entire scheme? Then Leslie presumably takes this to the boss, who only got this info from hubby, she claims hubby forced sexual favors under threat of firing and/or jail for theft and hubby is in deeper crap.

In other words, you should have gone back to sleep instead of writing this hare-brained, sleep- induced drivel.

Ha Ha!!

Enjoyed that short

4/5

When she got it nice and hard, she looked up at me and said, "can I tell my brother to stop chasing her now? He's gay and he's a bit out of his comfort zone."

What does that mean? The husband set that up? ***

Laughed so much I nearly shat myself. One of the best stories I've read yet. Please keep them coming

Wow did that ever have some twists and turns.

Way too many things going on here in such a short story for it to be an enjoyable read. Next time, slow down and dont make it so rushed.

AA++

Wow, this characters as big a d bag as his wife

Confusing

Can’t tell who is cheating without a score card. Way too much going on for such a short story.

How is the husband any better then the soon to be xwife.

Bobluvs1. He's not, he's a cheating bastard like every one, They're all a bunch of shits. Except the receptionist and the pragmatic manager. And they could be doing it? No moral turpitude at all. That's a US concept according to Wikipedia, I like it.

LJA644

Hilarious! Has everyone lost their sense of humor? He played people like a concert pianist.

Hmmm... sorry, but no.

I don't like cheating, whether by the husband, the wife or both... Cheaters deserve the worst in their lives. They deserve to learn that loneliness, remorse and pain prepared part of their miserable life from then on.

The MC belongs to the lowest class of corns...those who trade lead. And the worst... he doesn't have an ounce of character.

The fins, justify their means.

Regrettably, it does not seem so fictional. Very close to reality, although a little distorted.

But the writing effort earns me 3 stars.

But that was low, yes.

But that's just my opinion.

Interesting and unexpected

So both are morally corrupted just the husband was much smarter at it then his bimbo wife. It appears he set his wife up with a gay guy via his wanting secretary. Even the boss, shagging on company time with a subordinate has ethics issues. What a den of snakes...

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3.7****, Hooyah, low for the slimy morals/ethics but 5.5* for writing.

Good story up until the stuff with Leslie, which was ridiculous.

Started OK. Became a jumpled mess.

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Sorry I don’t think this is as good as your other story’s , I think you spoiled it from the boss at the end.

Quick and dirty.

I chuckled but didnt like any of the people. rk

Anonymous RK, You're not supposed to like them, they are all horrible cheating back stabbing gits, except the receptionist and pragmatic boss. LJA

Appreciate the many chuckles - including the numerous commentators who insisted on taking it all seriously.

He'd be further ahead with his boss. She is rich, kind of likes him and gets the cream out of his Twinkie... Maybe he should pee in her and make her belly big, that way,he'd have two new names, DADDY and HUSBAND!!

Short, clever, to the point.

What were they all thinking?

-jog

Clever twist. Quite a cold-blooded plotter.

Mundane Femdom agitprop.

So, I'm going to hold myself up for ridicule here by showing how dense I am that I didn't get this at all.

Why would Leslie's gay brother be pursuing the MC's wife for sex and why did the MC behave so spitefully towards Leslie after she'd just given him such a heavenly BJ?

So a troll is anyone who doesn't love your story and all the characters?

You are a better writer than this one. More like a hazy dream than a story. Hope this was a one-off that I can

forgive you.

A really dislikable story and characters.

He was very conniving.

Can't help but assume the timeline went something like:

1. He's cheating with his boss

2. She cheats with her previous boss

3. He cheats with his assistant (likely after finding out about her brother)

4. She works at cheating with the effeminate guy (her being set up)

So he can divorce her with it being her fault and his assistant will lose credibility when she tries to say her boss set her up to get his wife to cheat.

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All very odd though. We're in his head and he appears surprised in his head that she's cheating and indicates he's only guessing that she cheated with her previous boss.

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Sure seems he's the worse of the lot.

Not sure u know what "trading up" means

Sounds like a normal American workplace to me.

A somewhat likeable story, but it didn't grab me, so to speak. But the worst part to me was after telling his sec'y about his wife kissing the guy. Then he's doing his boss & whomever else. What I couldn't figure out was that the gay guy going after his wife. Say what? Anyway, 3 stars. Bob

Huh?

No! Not a fan. Poor plot and worse delivery.

Not every arrow hits the bullseye! So long as you continue to knok the arrows you’ve already won! 🥇

I think this story could also be placed in humor and satire. A great tale.

Cleverly written but I absolutely hated the MC, the fact that he succeeded in fucking over Leslie is an atrocity, Sorry, 2 stars, it started out enjoyable but the last 4 paragraphs (including the threat to delete comments) ruined the story completely. You should have stopped at Leslie's BJ - or, better yet, NOT made MC a crappy cheater too and skipped the BJ and just revealed the gay brother in a non-intimate conversation - THAT would have made it a 5 star story.

A great story until the BH. Christ, husband guts have just been rolled out for the second time and he accepts a BJ from a person her works with.

Your a GOOD writer but you demeanor your talent with this.

Unlike some others, I don't have a problem with the unsympathetic MC. He is a serial cheater and hypocrite that holds his wife to a higher standard. True to life, sometimes the bad guy wins. My problem with the story is that I can't for the life of me figure out why he screwed over his loyal assistant Leslie.

I liked it, and thought it was kind of funny. His soon to be ex-wife is having an affair with a gay man, and he gets a BJ from his assistant in his office, then does the boss. At least the guy is getting his share out of the home, plus he got the wife to admit she was having an affair with George, her former boss.

Haha, this went from a 3 to a 4 because of the hysterical twist. The thing I don't get is why did he bother to set up his wife with a honey pot - It's not like you get bonus points for adultery in divorce court. He should have just ran away with his rich boss and dumped irreconcilable differences on the wife.

Oh well, his wife was a cheating skank too

The husband set up his wife using Leslie and her faggot brother so he can get on with his boss. Now the boss should use him like trash