All Comments on 'Trained Ep. 01'

Needed better descriptions of the players and what makes them hot.

A bit more background on the players, male and female, would be helpful.

On that same note, what about the author? Every answer was no answer!

Nice build up. Already hot.

I like the angle. I like where it’s going.

Slow start, building tension, hopefully more substance to follow. May I politely suggest that you use the services of an editor. There are quite a number of grammatical errors & typos. It makes the story judder somewhat rather than flow. I'm not sure if English is your first language but please ask someone to check your work before publishing. Regards.

though the basic premise seems strange. Since the guys thought they were on a "be a gentleman" training course why would Clint suddendly decide he'll go off with a leather clad dominatrix wanting a fulltime sub? You've also portrayed Sam as a pretty spineless wimp so far, a relationship of relative mental equals would be a better start point to lead into a power exchange relationship imo.

I do like loving femdom stories which you claim to be writing, so as said I'll see how you develop it.

Poorly written.

I’m sorry to say that the story is very laboured and jumpy. I assume English is not your first language.