All Comments on 'Two Thighs Ch. 07'

by Pimanko

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Wiz1002Wiz1002almost 4 years ago
Developing nicely

I’ve enjoyed this series so far and love the way Ryan and Olivia have developed their liking for swinging and sharing partners with their neighbours. No doubt they will join the swinging group and experience more partners and I look forward to reading about that to.

I have but one criticism and that is that you proof read the story before submitting (or get an editor to do it for you). The elimination of several minor typos and inconsistencies would add greatly to the reading enjoyment.

Nevertheless keep up the good work

WoodencavWoodencav3 months ago

Excellent storey enjoying it, however you need to spot up on your anatomy, you say “ Taking it in her hand, she directed it into her uterus and started to ride him again.” You should have said Vagina as it’s absolutely impossible for a penis to enter a Uterus it would have to pass through the Cervix which is impossible, suggest you google a pic of a female sex reproductive organs. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

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I have published one book, ghost-written a second, contributed to an anthology, and a number of profession-related articles. All were non-fiction. It is fun to write erotic stories. My hope is that readers enjoy reading my stories as much as I enjoy writing them.

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