All Comments on 'Under Her Voice'

Very nicely written. I'm so glad you didn't leave out Louise at the end. Any considerations for a follow up? Maybe have a wedding and both getting pregnant? Just some thoughts. 😉

You have a problem with comma splices (two complete sentences that are joined by a comma instead of ending each sentence with a period) and it made for awkward reading a few times. Other than that, this was as an interesting story. It could have explored certain aspects deeper, but overall I liked it. Four stars.

That was awesome. Being a long time Dune reader, I knew who the Bene Gesserit were. I loved the story but really was hoping in the end, Louise or Kelly would prove to be more powerful with the voice than even his mom, but were just more discrete. Or, perhaps he turned out to be a Paul Atreides type and was the male ruler long forecast, but long feared. Anyway, great tale. 5/5 stars.

Dewey Cheatham