All Comments on 'Unexpected Company'

Please, please learn about Point of View (POV). You are writing in the first person, describing what you see and do. So you CANNOT also describe what the other person is thinking... and feeling... and imagining! It's impossible. You do this all through the story, making the POV ridiculous and therefore the story impossible.

The creative aspects are fine. However, if you aren't even in a room, you cannot describe what is going on if you are writing from your POV.

I really enjoyed this story! I felt the you did a great job of building the suspense as to who the Stranger could be, and I completely disagree with that comment about POV. Since when is it not ok to have multiple focuses in a story? I thought the insights into Kat's thought process added depth and excitement to the narrative.