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All Comments on 'Unexpected Pt. 01'

by ErisNightgale

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

good intro

and with that cliffhanger you better have part 2 already ready to publish ;)

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

I love where this is going, please submit part 2 soon!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

looking forward for part II!!!!

BamboozlerBamboozleralmost 2 years ago

That opening has filled me with anticipation, although I was hoping she wouldn't be able to find her car keys in her handbag at first ;)

BamboozlerBamboozleralmost 2 years ago

That opening has filled me with anticipation about what's going to happen next. I was kinda hoping she wouldn't be able to find her keys in her handbag ;)

ErisNightgaleErisNightgalealmost 2 years agoAuthor

hey thank you all so much for the feedback, it's all very helpful. english is not my native language so I may have some preposition and other grammar errors. feel free to comment on them

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

Learn how to format paragraphs and dialogue first, then maybe try writing.

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sometimes i write stories about how i like getting fucked, blurring the lines between real and the fake.i like recording myself and maybe role playing if i like you but i'm picky. maledoms, i'm here - give me all of that ultraviolence. vibes: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=...