by ErisNightgale
Learn how to format paragraphs and dialogue first, then maybe try writing.
hey thank you all so much for the feedback, it's all very helpful. english is not my native language so I may have some preposition and other grammar errors. feel free to comment on them
That opening has filled me with anticipation about what's going to happen next. I was kinda hoping she wouldn't be able to find her keys in her handbag ;)
That opening has filled me with anticipation, although I was hoping she wouldn't be able to find her car keys in her handbag at first ;)
good intro
and with that cliffhanger you better have part 2 already ready to publish ;)