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All Comments on 'Valeria Gets a Little Chaos in Her'

by JeanSummers

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AnonymousAnonymous3 months ago

Weird format, but okay.

Building on Lynx's overconfidence first would be preferred, as well as Valeria's heroic character.

Both would make the story more powerful. As it is, it feels like looking out the window and seeing something happen as you drive by.

JeanSummersJeanSummers3 months agoAuthor

Thanks for the feedback. It's the only story I've written using that format and I wasn't sure about it.

Thanks for the tips on improving the story. It's definitely appreciated.

SiarSiar2 months ago

Interesting twist on usual superhero stuff. I kinda hope to see more stories with Va;eria and Lynx.

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