All Comments on 'Virgin Writer Ch. 01'

...but unfortunately let down by a lot of poor punctuation (some sentences need to be read several times to make real sense) and other errors (some of which could be typos). I recommend that you find a good editor to help avoid these problems.

In the interest of full disclosure, the writer is one of my fave Literotica peeps, so I'll admit to some bias here. Some punctuation and choppiness aside, I like how the story starts. It reflects some realistic first meeting awkwardness camouflaged by nervous gesture and laughter. Rarely do stars, moons and lucky charms line up perfectly in first encounters. Can't wait to see what happens with the two next, so I'll get right to it!

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