All Comments on 'Waiting to be Used'

by Gareth77

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
Your choice of words disturbed the flow of the

story enough to make me dislike it. "The guest briefly continued their stroking" use of guest and their was ackward at best. Why not the guest briefly continue stroking? The their implies the possibility of multiple people but the just the use of guest also implies that so no advantage is gained by the use of their. Later she stated the guest, his, so if she knew why not say, the guest moved his hands? Other than that the scene was a bit immature.

xFREYAxxFREYAxover 15 years ago
I enjoyed it!

There was a previous comment about the use of "their" when the woman knew it was a man. She likely, and we certainly, didn't know it was a man until he stuck his cock in her mouth. I was pleased when the "their" use turned to "his" only when it was clear that the guest was a man.

Sexy story. Willing submission is apparently right up my alley!

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