by 8itgood
Please do us the service of getting yourself an editor if you're intending to continue writing. The errors are a constant distraction.
For example, not knowing the difference between then and than is grammar school level, and the use and placement of apostrophes is bonehead English from high school.
Not ready for prime time.
Well so far not the best I,v read but by far not the worst, looking forward to the next part