All Comments on 'What Happens in the Dark Ch. 01'

It'd be interesting if in a future ch you added a mother daughter kidnapping and made them compete for his attention

damn, great first chapter. Your "art is my fav class" and "too good to be true" are some of my fav stories. Keep it up

Interesting start, intrigued to see where you take it.

I've started looking for an Editor (or editors) for my stories, so that may delay my next chapters depending on how long it takes to find an editor for each story and to work out the process and get the editing done. Forgive me, and thank you for your patience.

Chapter 2 is edited and submitted for publication.

Interesting premise.

But sex is all too automatic.

Needed some extensive playing with her breasts, then teasing he pussy, with him describing -- in detail -- what he was going to do. Needed her getting hotter and hotter, wetter and wetter, hornier and hornier util she had to beg him to allow her to orgasm.

Three stars.

... except this is a ravishment story. He isn't trying to be a pleasure DOM. He's wholly in this for himself. That would completely change the nature and premise of the story.

Interesting incel fantasy, but while the main character seems to have depth, Karen is too cliche and unrealistic to be compelling.