All Comments on 'What The Heart Doesn't Know Ch. 02'

You really need an editor or a spell checker there are so many spelling errors in this it makes it very hard to read please try and sort this out as the story is a good one and I'm intrigued

Good second chapter personally I don't care about the grammar and misspellings ( usally fix in my head while I read so I don't notice half them) but the chapters could be a bit longer

...continue to read it, too many spelling mistakes together with incorrect idioms makes it unreadable. Get someone to proofread please.

I like the story theme, but with the spelling errors it is hard to read. I spend nearly as much time trying to figure out the correct spelling of a word and then what word the author should have used to convey what he wanted to say as I do reading:-( Definitely get an editor to help with the spelling and flow. Keep writing, I want to know what happens, as well as watch your development as a writer.

the spelling doesn't matter to me, but i wish the chapters were a little longer. keep writing

just the chapters are short. i do hope that they expand as time goes on, or that they are posted quickly if they are to be so brief

This chapter was much less enticing than the first. The largest problem I think I had, was with the killing of the parents. Cheap way to make it easier for yourself, and not satisfying for us. You just wanted any easy out. I don't mind short chapters, but if they are, please put a little time into making the plot strong. Grammar and spelling are easy for an editor to fix at a later date, but when you weaken the plot, you seriously damage things...the parents didn't need to die yet. Also, I seriously lost respect for Nicholas, and for your character-building skills. Not arousing or interesting. I did not enjoy any of this chapter....this being said, I have read and re-read your first chapter 4 times. It was exciting, hopeful. I think I will probably read that first chapter again, but I'm not sure if I'll continue to follow the rest of the story...

The parents dying was a bit abrupt, but the plot is interesting so far. Write more!

why did you stop writting? i loved it

Its really good. I would love to read more!

Jeez, finish a couple of these stories before starting new ones!