All Comments on 'When Cheaters Pay'

very nice, I really enjoyed it, cant wait to read the next one.

English as a second language and editing needed with the subject area of bullshit.

I liked it. I think a lot of others will like it, too. Remember, you CANNOT please everyone, and it's pointless to try. Four.

I couldn't get past the first few paragraphs of constantly having to stop and try to figure out what the real words should be- gave up.

"But, probably the husband wasn't as smart enough to hide the details of his business as he thought he was, . . . "

"It's not like her didn't love her, but the dick between his legs was always had a much stronger influence on him than anything else . . ."

"The cooking had taken her to a world where she did still love her, 'NO!' her mind shouted as soon as her mind diverted to the concept of love."

wtf is this? A bad joke from Google Translate?

I accidently gave this 2 *'s, one too many.

This is not BDSM, this belongs in the Non-Con section.

Also, you could use rewriting and/or an editor.

It's not very bad. But it's not good either.

It's clear you like writing, but you need some help.

Good luck!

This story/author desperately needs an editor. Also, I agree with an earlier comment that this is more suited for Non-Con. Please consider less physical pain versus more emotional pain. Your female character must be more clever and less brutal. There is promise with both this story and this author but there are some rough edges.

She Who Shall Not Be Named

Did you proof read this before submitting? You have got the wrong pronouns in places. It was also unclear whether you were writing about the wife or the girlfriend or even someone's brother in the first few paragraphs.

Uh, okay? He cheated on her yes, doesn't mean he deserves all that. Kind of went over some lines no?