All Comments on 'When In Brighton'

I like it. It builds on their relationship. You might flesh out the page 1 background a bit more. I just want to get to pages 3 and 4. Keep it up (also, a hint to Anthony??).

This is a great beginning. I look forward to where things progress.

I may come and watch too. Brighton is not far from me 😉

Thank you both - it's much appreciated! I sent the story to a male friend of mine, whom I know is a bit of a Literotica fan. His comments were very much on the same lines - i.e. it reads like a chapter 1 and there's not enough naughtiness in there!

I shall keep writing, but in the meantime, I've penned a story for the 'erotic couplings' section entitled 'Meet Me In St Leonard's'