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by BashfulScribe

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RangeExpanderRangeExpanderalmost 2 years ago

I like the Toronto setting and the premise that unlikely people can get together and have a lot of fun. Somehow the story felt a bit too rambling for me. I think it would benefit from tightening up, probably shortening a bit in the editing.

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Just your average young man who thinks he can make himself into a writer. I'm interested in making longer stories where the sex is a part of the story.