All Comments on 'When Wife Earns More Money'

750 word stories that convey a satisfying storyline and covers the necessary bases is hard to do for even the most talented and experienced writers. They more often than not are incomplete in necessary details or background. The reader feels the hollow nature of the writing or feels cheated with no real ending. I liked this story and see why 750 words would have deprived the reader as well as the author. This was an interesting read and unique telling. I only gave it 4 stars, because I felt you were trying to condense what should have been a longer, more complete story. I did like what you put into it though.

I liked what there was of it. But given the conflict in it, condensing it was not the best approach. For me, I want to feel the conflict, which is present here but very dry and emotionless. I haven't yet read any of your other work, so this critique is based solely on this story.

I'd suggest more dialogue. If the wife is being an ass, draw her comments out more. Similarly, if the husband is fed up, the words should make the reader feel his anger. If you were the husband, how would you respond ? I don't suggest that the husband beat up the wife, but throwing things at a wall and shouting is one way to make the reader identify with a wronged husband.

What Story

Great job!

***Thanks for the read.

Tried to save it at the end but felt like too little too late

Interesting premise but damp squib end.

Needs to be at least 7500 words.

More conversation needed between the 2 MCs.

This is not a 750 word story.

Expand it and you will have a potential 5/5

Regards

Thank You all. Dear Reader, 29 percent of wives earn more than their husbands (today in 2024), thanks to systematic selection that pushes boys to "work" and girls to "study." (only in so-called "First World" countries, USA, UK and subjugated colonies, so farewell Hamilton 1776).

Our civilization is unable to digest this change (sociologists would speak of a "paradigm revolution"), and every single husband believes he is the only one in the world in this predicament, and every single wife marvels that she is the only woman in the world in this absence of balance.

I am not an erotic novelist, as you can well see. I am a boring old essayist who could bore hundreds of unfortunate readers with lessons in history and geography. I have a gold medal in Extreme Boredom. As you can see from this note, which is longer than the tale! And don't encourage me to write 7,500 words--I already have 75,000 ready and can bore thousands of readers.

I only hope that a new fashion begins, in which many authors (men and women) examine an established social fact: the Wife Earns More Than the Husband [tag=WEMTH!}, but the two love each other and would like to live in harmony and balance. I understand that it is much easier to write that the hotwife gathers unknown Bulls and the vengeful husband will want to Burn That Witch, but that is the easy way to write and to get numerous views and high ratings.

I don't Burn That Witch, I seek peace and harmony.

I am just a boring old man, very repetitive, and I will repeat my narratives to the few who have the patience to read me.