All Comments on 'Who Says I Can't Fuck My Mother?'

Needs work

Learn how to spell. You Sounds like a 5th grader

Spelling? Atrocious!! Structure? Nonexistent!! Plot? Unrecognizable if you intended to have one. Too bad there is no 0 rating available so you get a solid “1” star.

Worst spelling ever. Grammar, syntax abominable. Please finish grade three before submitting again.

Just gave up mid way through the first page. Spelling errors were too distracting.

steal vs steel

course vs coarse

Bridged vs Bridgit

tiered vs tired

Bad bad writing, poor English, awful spelling. Is this from someone for whom English is a 2nd language? Did they learn the language from tick-tock?

Get an editor before you submit anything again.

Reality is a great memory..

More please...

The idea is great, but you certainly need to find an editor.

It would have been good except for all the errors in grammar and spelling.

Couldn't even read the whole thing. The point where it said "urs" instead of "yours" was when I just gave up. Please work on your writing skills before your next story.

Get an editor, or at least learn how to use spell check for God's sake....

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I love that he shot load after load into his mother and she allowed him to breed her

Lots of misspelled words and bad grammar.

Next chapter

It started out with potential, but like all others, the grammar is too distracting. There are many errors that don't make sense either. You start by saying your cock is just average and all of a sudden it grew to a huge fat one? seriously.

Having said that, keep working at it, you do seem to have some good story potential in your mind, but it needs an editor's help before publishing.

"I don't have a monster but most girls either smile or at least comment on its size. It is about 8inches long but very thick, and when I say thick, I mean fat. It has a circumference of somewhere 9inches and a bit."

Everyone in the comment section can't get past the grammar, spelling, and syntax, but I'm stuck on your MC's dick size. He is 8 inches long by 9 inches wide, like my baking pan. This made me chuckle at the ridiculousness; even the stories under the Gay Male don't exaggerate this impressively.

I didn't give you a score because I'm nice, and this is your first story on Lit, so it will not be perfect. Then again, you did get nine followers on your first story. Not bad. I only got four and wrote two stories, so maybe I need to be ridiculously generous with sizes to get more followers. Who knows?

Quite a few readers here are bossy, mean, nasty, rude, giving you a bad score because you didn't cater to their fetishes like the hairy pussy old fart who should spend more time going to church than reading porn, telling their life stories, weird philosophy, and glorifying abuse. I think Lit should gate-keep some of the comments.

I'm usually easy on first timers, but you need to be somewhat accurate on size. 8 inches long and 9 inches thick? Imagine if he was only 4 inches long and 4.5 inches thick.

I truly apologize to all English speakers for butchering your language!

Not taking this back, it boggles my mind how americans can easily criticise others, and have themselves nearly 20% illiterate in their population and the rest butchered English like no one before!

However, for all those who did not notice, I said circumference not diameter, If you want, you can calculate the circumference with the diameter. 2 x π x r or circumference = 9 inches :π = diameter! I am used to metric and would not know Ellen, feet, inches and yards.

To all others, really thank you for liking my story, being patient with me, and I just posted the second part. How I breed my mom) I also asked somebody to edit for me, Lets see.

Pathetic story and written like a SECOND grader......

"it boggles my mind how americans can easily criticise others"

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It boggles my mind that you made a deliberate decision to write in what you acknowledge is not your native language, and are then pissed when people note your deficiencies. If I posted something in another language (e.g., German, Italian, Hindi) and my post was lacking in that language, I would expect people to make criticize me for my deficiencies.

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You want to write for your own enjoyment, find, but your right to be pissed ended when you decided to make it public.

You have a great idea but need to proof read a bit more, and expand on your story. slow the roll a bit so to speak.

Where are you Phot, and what's your native tongue? I'm just trying to figure out your language.

Didn't care for this one there was way too much degrading of his mother 2 stars

You need more than just an editor! It is ALWAYS advisable to do a spell-check at least! Plaid and I’m sure you meant ‘Played’. It is acceptable only if English is not your first language.

Very poorly written!