All Comments on 'Whose Fault Was It (Second Half) Ch. 04'

I was hoping this would be the end.

Go away.

Okay, I don't get the comment. If it's trash, why are you reading it and why are you hiding behind anonymous to do it? So someone has talent and a good story, which I'M enjoying. What makes it trash?

Please finish the story. It's been interesting. Even if nobody else likes it, you should finish it. There's nothing worse than an unfinished story.

I wish Emma was my wife!

You ended it a ways back and are not just putting down words. You have to work on endings and know when you are there. To keep writing after the suspense is over and the situation is resolved is a huge mistake. This is that.

To all of the brave souls with negative comments, please have the balls to reveal your name (remind you it is only a pseudo-name.)

Normally I am partial to stories where at the end the cheating wife suffers at the end of this story. Both cheating party suffer their time in purgatory and redemption has come by and bless both.

Well done over all I gave it a 4.

This is a great story. Please continue!

Thank you for the time and efforts to entertain us. I do appreciate it. I am kind of walking the line with these stories. And yes, I think you have combined 2 stories into one. My opinion is that you should have separated this into two different stories. Jeremy and Emma's could have gone into the erotic section while Mark and Janet could have gone in the loving wives. No big deal really but I found myself just scanning the parts with Jeremy and Emma to get to the Mark and Janet parts. Course its an opinion and we all know the saying about that. Having said that, I do again thank you for the work you did. I will continue to read your work.

I have enjoyed your series and agree it is time to finish it, and start another. But please watch your spelling as spell checker only rejects incorrectly spelled words, not incorrectly chosen ones. For example, did Emma need to have "bear skin" or "bare skin." There were a number of others like that, and they distract from your engaging plot. Thanks for your time and efforts.

A bit kinky, but certainly hot!!!!!

the last 2 pages are suddenly about jeremy and emma?

But still pretty good -

So where to now lol

Thanks for the offering.

ANd since when was this a BDSM story about Emma and Jeremy? At least post it in BDSM so others can avoid reading it.

I thought this was about Mark and Janet? What the heck is this garbage about Jeremy and Emma being freaks? Crap!

The first two pages rated really good but not the third page in this chapter.

That bondage was a little lame to be honest. And lame things aren't very erotic. I'm not here to complain about cheating stories not being erotic.

The way I see it, it has to either be sadistic and/or submissive, but it wasn't sadistic (from what I read, I skipped most of it), and she talked without being spoken to, and did not address her dom properly, making it not very submissive. Shit, just addressing him as master and kneeling at the foot of the bed waiting for orders would have been a great start. Add to that wearing a fluorescent collar going out and you have half a good story. Add a remote control vibrator and electric shock and you get your daily dose of sadism, denial, and nonconsent all in one and there's a story already. Lol, a dog training shock collar. Staying in cuffs is not very good, and is cruel if they are police cuffs.

And the story is like a vine that needs to be pruned. This was irrelevant. I don't think it was ever revealed that she was ever planning to give up her ass. So what the hell? So many stories go to the enema bag when they're full of shit.

And whoever wants to can come dump on whatever story they fucking feel like, whenever they want, even Tuesdays. The calls for accounts are just the first step, get one then you'll be heckled for not being published. Publish, then you'll be mocked for having a grammar mistake. No. If you don't like anonymous comments on stories that author's have allowed anonymous comments on, don't read the comments.

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