All Comments on 'Wilderness Adventure'

It was a great start, but there needs to be more.

I agree with the previous commnent...MORE!

Keep this going!

Had the makings of a great story. Seemed to rushed and too short.

i have now read all of your short stories. and like them this one needs a follow up. in fact your other two could use a follow up 5 stars

Such a great set up for such a dissapointing and short interaction. The story needed way longer to build intimacy between the two, it doesn't make sense for them to jump immediately into sex given their circumstances. Not to mention the sex itself was literally two paragraphs, also needs to be far longer and more detailed.

Good beginning!

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