All Comments on 'Within Amie Ch. 01'

please continue

Hooray!! Your back!! Thank goodness!! Good start.

I love the storyline, I'm really anxious to read more. editing is actually really awesome, so it's flowing together well. Keep it up!

I'm sorry but your friend just isn't catching the grammatical errors (tenses are all wrong).

I like the story, and I know I'm going to get slated by other readers for saying this, but I couldn't read past page 1 as it was just too irritating.

Keep going with the writing

Jayleen, are you sure your female character is 18 and not 8 as she behaves this supid way?

It is okay to have multiple editors, different people catch different mistakes! Many published books have a long list of "Thank you to so&so" because those people read it prior to publishing and proofread their story.