by Jayleen88
It is okay to have multiple editors, different people catch different mistakes! Many published books have a long list of "Thank you to so&so" because those people read it prior to publishing and proofread their story.
Jayleen, are you sure your female character is 18 and not 8 as she behaves this supid way?
I'm sorry but your friend just isn't catching the grammatical errors (tenses are all wrong).
I like the story, and I know I'm going to get slated by other readers for saying this, but I couldn't read past page 1 as it was just too irritating.
Keep going with the writing
I love the storyline, I'm really anxious to read more. editing is actually really awesome, so it's flowing together well. Keep it up!