All Comments on 'Words'

Great story, the best I have read in a long time. It ask for a sequel.

The author asks: Can you destroy a betrayer with just words? YES, you can.

And yes, please do a part 2 of this well written story.

Seven hundred three comments. As of this moment.

Dickwad doesn't have a wife, does he? Story's perfect. But for fun, I'm imagining him being asked "What if you did? Would you have betrayed her for this? Yes and no both make him and her look horrible.

Please, please do a Sequel. The fallout, the family. It sounds like there's history in the family.

I really love this paragraph, in which the MC just destroys the "it just happened" defense:

"OK, then. I think this is bullshit, from start to finish. I think all this protestations of 'it just happened' is horseshit, and right now, it's slopping over my shoes. You don't just 'fall in love' Kristi. You know that. It's an effort of will. You have to do all those small things along the way. Spending time together, seeking each other out, letting the other person know you are interested. In jokes that no one else gets. Little glances and touches. Personal and intimate things. That's how you fall in love. And you Do Not Do Them Unknowingly. You make a conscious choice to do them. At the least, it's a conscious choice to not prevent yourself doing them. You know that. I know that. Even fuck face here knows that."

there are sequels you can find them on this site

Loved this, so well put, how can a cheater trust a cheater?

I’d have loved you to write a follow up, but expect load’s will, trouble with that is it’s never quite the same.

Awesome

In the end. I loved when he broke Ass Wipes nose .. prefect ending after he ripped her apart verbally

Waaaaaaayyy too much useless blather. It was irritating to read.

after having skipped most of page 1 and some page 2 it startd to get interesting but why the hell he went through another couple of pages to finish what he should have done first I'll never know. OH nearly forgot, the writing was good.

Awesome narration & detailing to the scene. 5 of 5

St least he punched the dick,!!!@..yay!@@

One of the best ever. I would love to read a follow-up on the cheaters life together. How friends and family react to Kristi's new living arrangements and how they came to be. You know, a FTDS treatment.

(4/22/2023) She cheated, betrayed him, hurt him, and was delusional about it. She still loved him but wasn’t going to let go of her side piece and she didn’t expect him to see other women because she would be hurt. So, he told her off, broke the prick's nose, and threw them both out. The End. I just couldn’t get into it. This story had no foundation to it. No character development. It felt like half a story with 14k of filler, IMO. I will not be revisiting this story.

Lost me at "nicely loaded" if needs that to have fun we are diametrically opposite.

1-2 drinks socially and have fun. Don't deal well with drunks. Too many family members and others alcoholic. And many excuses about drinking.

Would have liked to see some closure on the backend, at least plotwise but was a fun read.

This was the 2nd time I've read this, and thought it was better this time around. I gave it 5 stars. I really liked the "flushing of the rings" part the best, as it symbolized that she flushed their marriage down the drain too. And to do it right before her eyes, would be an even bigger symbol of it. Her knowing that those rings were made from her fathers ring had to hurt even more.

To anonymous from 24 days ago, there is a part 2/sequel to this story. It's not as good, and they don't get back together. Sorry if I ruined it for you.

Good story. Just one quibble - You can’t dive/snorkel in Pearl Harbor. It is an active Naval Base. Definitely off limits to civilians. And if you get caught trying to dive around the Arizona you can go to jail as it is a National Memorial and a War Grave.

Great story! I wished that I could give more of an artistic perspective, but I would be tripping over myself gushing over intense dialog.

STRAIGHT UP 5 STARS! ☆☆☆☆☆

Too many nonsense in between. Story could've been shorter and to the point.

Too much boring stuff in middle just should've got to the point needs another chapter to tell us what happened afterwards

Pure fantasy, kind one of those “what I should have said was... what I should have done was” tales that some people like to tell when they got walked all over by an adversary. It doesn’t matter though, because no matter what the MC did or said he was going to be the loser in the end. James was smirking because he knew that no matter how hubby reacted he was walking out with the man’s wife. Broken nose or not it was going to be his dick bottoming out Kristi’s pussy from now on and if her blowhard husband wanted to be a willing cuckold and “share” his wife he’d be getting pity fucks on an ever decreasing basis until he was totally cut off. MC’s actions just drove Kristi further into James’s arms. James was also laughing to himself at Kristi’s dumbass plan to inform her husband about their new wife sharing arrangement because it was sure to go over like a turd of an idea, which he knew it was from the start. All he had to do was try to keep a straight face while his free pussy made her speech. Afterwards they would leave and fuck and he could do whatever he wanted to her and treat her however he wanted to because she was now his slut without her formally devoted husband to interfere or for her to turn to for support. He’d hit that pussy until he got tired of her dumb bitch mouth and attitude and simply kick her sorry ass to the curb. James is the winner in this story and perhaps the enviable anti-hero.

3 stars and really the major mistake here is that the MC should have broken the ASSHOLES nose first, thrown him outside and then sat down to verbally trash his ex-wife. Plus you should have added a few more paragraphs describing all the retribution he heaped on her friends and relatives. Basically, this is just one half of the story.

Unfinished 2stars

The husband’s response was satisfyingly brutal.

The all-time BURN THE BITCH takedown. So slowly laid out, so carefully put together, and so thoroughly delivered.

Curiously, I am not by nature, nor inclination, a BTB kind of guy, but this was so expertly done. Too much perhaps, a tad bit over the top - oh yeah. But damn, you didn’t leave enough ash on the floor for a ‘chalk outline.’

Well done, we’ll fucking done.

Oh, and anyone who down-scored this story is a dim bulb indeed. Get a clue fool.

my Cyrano has arrived

Na he played this wrong. He should have agreed and let her have her moment there and then secretely contacted an extraction team to meet him at a club where he took her as he put a little sedative in her drink as she went to piss. Then load her ass in the van and haul her off to one of the mexican whore house and now she get fucked every day multiple time as she is hooked on drugs. Destroy this stupid persons life as she did his.

Well written! Most won't truly understand the story as there are very few who are able to use words with such controlled accuracy. His response was perfect. He used words and imagery like a bullet with her name engraved upon it. There is no way to make yourself instantly free from emotional pain by using these "bullets" on yourself though a thinking person knows your agony will be short lived if you are consoled by the absence of wrong doing. There will be no consolation for her, ever. James is nothing and cannot change that.

I want words 2

Powerful!

So good, needs part 2

Well told. Complete in itself. Definitely does not need a part 2.

Second read for me, I love how good a wordsmith you are, just wish I was half as good,

All the things the wordsmith of a husband didn't say. How long had it been going on, 3 months, 6 months, a year, 2 years? If he had known at the time he would have been so much younger to start to search again. Jimmy or Asswipe, had he been married, how old was he, did he mind being the minor partner (according to her) in a relationship with a barren woman, did he already have children, was he infertile too, or did he have additional options in the proposed throuple? If the husband could get over the issues of a lack of trust children were now on his horizons. Surely he would not let the wife escape feeling inferior about her inability to have children. If you are going to cut, cut deep, plant every possible feeling of inadiquacy and let the brew ferment. This is in no way original, I have experienced it once and seen it twice, that purely malicious and evil poisinous state of mind a woman gets into when she has tired of ger husband, long term partner or whatever. Men are mere novices at that level of spite and wickedness.

Superb story- wish a lot of others were half as g

Excellent, insightful work

Five for you

Of course the narcicism it takes to try make her fantasy real means nothing at all would get through and she would be over it in a short time.

got read again

So you could have cared less, quite telling really. I'm not sure there are many ppl who would actually go to their partner and sit them down for a chat about opening up the marriage like that.

My FIL had a long affair and when caught his response was similar, but he knew that his wife loved him to bits, just didn't know that she wouldn't go for it, but till the day she died decades later she would have taken him back.

I think my PIL story is far more prevalent than this one, as women tend to love far more deeply and unconditionally than men, who often let their petty egos get in the way.

Burnt to a crisp by destroying the facade of her self image and poisoning any future relationships. Transcendent BTB.

Stunning. Excellent. Self contained.

The caption "Words" said it all. The story is about beating around the bush. I would rather the caption should change to "Psychology 101."

This cat typed and typed and typed and never conveyed a thing.

What an arse hole. In someway he was just as bad has she was. There was no need for all that dialogue, he should have just shown her the door and not allowed her to speak. 3*

Outstanding story with well developed characters. Thank you

God, the arrogance of these women commenting. Women can never take responsibility for their bad actions. Mgtow

I think I must have read this story 4 or 5 times now and still enjoy it . Its a 5 * read all day long as far as I'm concerned .

The only criticism I have is him throwing his beer at the wall . For one thing it's a rather silly show of temper , acknowledging something has got to you . For another , it's not only a waste of good beer ,but also you yourself are going to have to clean the mess up , not her .

All her reasons for having her affair were calmly shown for the tawdry fakery they were .

He shows her the kind of man she is tying herself to . The kind of man who happily goes after a married woman . And at some point doubts about their relationship will start to creep in , suspecting each other of cheating !

xMule hits the nail firmly on its head .

So I really liked this one... mostly. It was just the last few bits that sort of lost it a little. I love that throughout the whole argument he was calm, he was in control he was tearing apart her flimsy justification and defences with pure words and logic.

So the end where he finally loses his temper takes away from that. Up until now he's been in control making every move a flawless one. So throwing beers at the wall just undermines him. Taking the rings back was a good move but flushing them was petty. In that act he jumped into the mud slinging pit along with them. Personally had he just pulled his ring off and hers and handed all of them back to her with a "As far as im concerned we are no longer married, you can do whatever you want with these now" It would have bit better.

Thats just me though.

Sad? Yes! Brutal? Yes! Worth reading? No way!

Just the destruction of three lives with ancillary destruction to the lives of others related to them.

I think the author must be a sadist.

Brilliant! And as another poster said (sort of), women truly are bat shit crazy!

@Helen1899

....There was no need for all that dialogue, he should have just shown her the door and not allowed her to speak. 3* -

That would have done absolutely nothing to make her see what she had done.

@nixrox

re: 3 stars and really the major mistake here....

You have already voted at least 3 other times, each time giving 5 stars.

Wishy washy much!

for all the naysayers l at least he didn't kill anybody .

Sometimes surgery by well-chosen & well-used words can be MU H more painful than with a scalpel...

...this was an example in a 5-star tale of mutual pain.

Third time reading this and I always find something new. One of the best ever posted in LW.

whackdoodle,

.... He took the rings of her body, he committed theft AND the moment he flushed....

Not everyone drops a dime at the first smell of a broken law.

@Helen1899.

What an idiotic comment! You do understand these are fictional stories, right? They aren’t documentaries. If he’d just shown her the door the story would have been over in 3 paragraphs.

This might be too deep for you to grasp but the reason for the dialogue was him destroying his soon to be x wife’s delusional thought that what she was doing wasn’t a significant issue. Using words only (instead of the usual BTB crap) was killing her as a human being.

You must. Stop embarrassing yourself!

Long winded bill shit

The "Words" concept is great. You detracted from it with the physical violence used against the, uh, 'boyfriend.' Also the gratuitous use of insulting terms when referring to him. IMHO just calling him something like "this person" or "your companion," continuously would have worked well and raised the moral status of the narrator. Other than that, I like the story a lot. With my own stories I have a well-earned reputation in favor of reconciliation, but the woman in this story provided no opening for anything like that. She wanted her cake and eating it too, and she was prepared to push the issue.

Brilliant!

Word-Smith writing was/is very good.

I did about the same thing by saying. "What do you want for our assets division?"

Yes she has suffered ever since.

I now have drove nearly to the end of life's lane; near the end; winter has arrived.

One of the very best stories on here. The power of communication is often underestimated and shouldn't be. Well done over it. BardnotBard

Good story and well written. Would love to see a follow up.

Kristi is a special kind of delusional cheating bitch. Hard to believe she's not in a psych ward. I was laughing at the sheer insanity of what she was spouting. How the hell did he not notice this shit after 11 years? Love really is blind I guess. He wasn't far off calling her "evil" with the justifications he made. Christ this is kind of terrifying to people with trust issues and fear of betrayal since everything seemed so right, he did everything right, then boom, it all falls apart so suddenly one day and the person you've devoted your life to, who you thought loved you, pulls this shit. I really need to stop reading these cheating themed stories. They are doing a fucking number on me :(

Was flushing the rings really necessary? Seems like a waste of money.

Anyway I felt like it ended too soon. I felt like we needed to see the consequences more. Like she has a breakdown after her family shuns her, the new beau cheats on her, and she goes off the rails and what not. Seems she got off too easy.

Is it wrong if I take a little pleasure in how well he utterly destroyed her? Yeah, I don’t think so either. I’m curious, does a person have to have the intent to do harm in order to be considered evil? Perhaps evil can exist through the act of being so self-absorbed that you cease to take anyone else into consideration? Taking what you want no matter the cost. It’s pretty sad.

Wow! Well-done. The evil witch has ben evicted. Loved it.

Ed

To some of the commenters who apparently have no clue: you realize he effectively deconstructed her psyche. Her and James' relationship is poisoned and will now die. She won't be able to look at this without guilt and self loathing. He wielded an emotional scalpel effectively.

InfiniteCycle, in their comment a couple of years ago, captured the essence of this essay particularly well. Bravo!!

(I find reading comments as interesting as the stories themselves--> A whole new LitLevel! 😁)

LordSlamdawgg,

You make a great case for thinking before acting!

(Comment from about 2018+/-)

Sbrooks103x:

If you live in Bellevue WA, the monetary value of 3 rings is negligible...

Good story but needs a follow up where the CUNT Kristi sees her "boy toy" cheat on her, her female friends will "never" leave alone with their husbands and her family who label an "evil" WHORE. She spends her remaining days fending off men who pursue her not as a possible mate but a CHEAP piece of pussy. Someone they could bend over the desk but, Heaven forbid, never be seen with in public much less take home to mother!

Brilliant.

That was seriously fucking BRILLIANT! You nailed this one so perfectly I can’t believe what I just read. The feeling of the room, the emotion of the characters and the perfection of his spectacular arguments and statements that were made to not just explain but to cause maximum damage was just better than anything I had ever come across and thank you for giving me this experience that I shall treasure and read over time and again.

I would seriously love to have seen it continue to read what would become of her and her deranged belief system and maybe at some point you or someone else will do that but since I jumped right into commenting on this, I haven’t even had a chance to check.

Lexx xoxo

I would love a "final chapter" even if it was small to close this off. This was a work of art but not being able to read about the fallout hurts the story in my opinion. Do you think you might write that epilogue?

Good one!!! A really, really good one! Thanks , I thoroughly enjoyed your excellent tale!

Just words…. That’s all. It’s like two tortoise fighting…

A bit long for the content, but still Five stars.

JPB

Second read for me. Still impresses as a most effective dissection of the “you didn’t know for months and you didn’t miss anything of me, so you won’t if it continues” claptrap contentions.

I thought Anonymous of 7 months ago (commencing: “Pure fantasy, kind one of those “what I should have said was... ”) made valid observations as to the nature of, and benefits accruing to, the sleazy James (aka dickwad) character. The idea being he gets the win, and isn’t actually emotionally invested in the relationship with the cheating slut wife, so when he dumps her in a month or so (the ending perhaps in part contributed to by her mental anguish following upon the MC’s destruction of her self image), no true loss to him. He'll quickly be off pursuing another married lady to ‘validate his superiority’ or some other such feckless delusion.

The losers are the parties to the marriage that has been destroyed by her infidelity. A deliberate choice she made, as the MC pointed out so eloquently. For the ex-wife-to-be, she’ll discover that the absence of the illicit in her relationship with sleaze-ball, and the loss of the counter-balance of the familiar safe loving stability of her marriage to her husband (replaced with a gnawing guilt for her ‘evil’ done unto him), it won’t be riding off into the sunlit uplands for her, more a journey down the Styx with deep laments to occupy the quiet spaces of her mind. I predict a somewhat lonely future with a succession of unsuccessful shallow relationships. For the MC, there will be lasting emotional damage, trust issues will linger and pop up to prominence at odd moments, the term ‘gun-shy’ is apt.

5* for a well written piece exposing the absence of merit in the usual cheaters’ mantras. One of the best out there on LW viz the ‘We've got to talk’ genre,

Jim

What great reasoning throughout. Perfectly done, really.

Well written, densely reasoned.

What's the title of the Orson Scott Card book?

the follow up would be the 2 cheaters don't last very long everybody who they know is either told or finds out about it etc. no happy ending of any kind for any of them ??

This was really good. But man, does this story need more chapters. Atleast a part where he finds a new woman and learns to trust again.

If you're going to write about being a mediator, at least take Psych 101 at a community college first.

Like the original approach. Would like to see the next chapter....the mediator at the divorce negotiations.......

Just Wow!!!! 5.

Brilliant story!!!! Nicely written! Great words ;)

Boring. Too wordy and very little character development. For someone who is supposed to be good with words, he drones on and on with very little substance.

15k words and hardly 2k words worth of actual story took place. So many details whatnot. No aftermath, no epilogue, no mention of anything that would justify the time wasted to read this. The rating, the title and the buildup felt so great but it was just basic.

A bit long winded but finally done the right thing.

I couldn't get past the ego, narcissism, and contempt on the first page.

One of the best stories here. The pace and pathos building this up layer by layer was perfect. It wasn't too wordy because he had to chip away at her arguments and delusions before he could bring the whole edifice crashing down. Very original very well written. BardnotBard

Brilliant (and enjoyable) in so many ways… but one (for me). I wished he had used his wisdom and words and love to try to save/free her, not destroy her and a part of himself in the process. What did she need freeing/saving from? Her ridiculous ideas and beliefs about love and marriage/relationships and herself. All the ridiculous rationalizations that cheating spouses come up with to justify their own cheating behavior.

In the end, she vowed to “forsake all others”, … and he vowed “for better, or worse “. That said, both could be remedied in a sequel. But some things are harder to undo than others.

Thanks for writing and especially for addressing/shedding light on many of the ridiculous empty justifications for cheating posted in this site.

The biggest problem in this story "though I gave it 5 stars" (for the man holding his virtues) so the problem is you stated in descriptive detail all her "though delusional and wrong" reasons justifying her actions, but left out him explaining how and why her actions were so wrong and evil. Leaving the readers to fill in those reasons, the problem there is not everyone is intellectual and moral enough to fill in those things left unsaid, so if words have power and saying them give them even more, then all the reasoning of why her actions were evil and wrong gain no power in your story, and can't enlighten anyone.

Very good, enough to have read it three times. Thank you - 5 stars

somewhere east of Omaha

So, while all my friends and Buddies are having kids and becoming Fathers, I stayed married to you a Barren woman. And THIS IS HOW YOU PAY ME BACK? You pay be back by being a complete whore fucking around on me? 10 big Blazing Stars. Thanks, Buster2U

Ask any one, you're mind can't go over 100 MPH. Loved it! But I'm deducting one star for placing an ellipsis at the beginning of a sentence. I taught my students that they should always indicate a pause in your words! I HATE DOT DOT DOTS. They are for children! 4 stars!

@gladventurer

Sorry, but your post is delusional.

First, there was nothing to save. She wasn't talking about a drunken one-night stand. She wasn't even talking about needing to go and 'find herself' or 'confirming she's still an attractive women' by going on an overnight date.

She was sitting there with bozo the clown, because she had developed a relationship with another man to the point where she felt she had the right to split her affections between her husband and a breathing dildo, who had been titillating her romantic funny bone.

She isn't the one who needed saving. She was the one who destroyed a monogamous partnership. She was the one who had betrayed their promises and ideals. She'd betrayed the contract, and done it in secret, only blindsiding her husband because he believed in her love and honesty, and she used her knowledge of that as a weapon.

She is not worth saving. She is not redeemable anyway. And on that subject, she is the source and the cause of the damage that would mean that He is the one who is deserving of rescue, but he won't get that either.

And she has done real damage. Her husband is never going to trust another, like he naturally did when they were a couple. All those good years, all that belief in what they had, and she showed him just how secure he can be, should he unreservedly put his trust in another woman. Not gonna happen. He might very well find a companion some way down the road. Might even live happily and share joy. But he will never, ever, just presume that a new partner is not capable of betrayal.

No, the outcome of this one is just right. She killed it, it's dead. Time to sweep away the ashes and continue on, and she will deserve every moment of regret, of doubt, and of self-loathing for losing a man who loved her for her, despite her issues, and despite her physical limitations. A man who had accepted that it would only be her in his future, there would not be anyone to carry his name, and now it's probably too late. Even if he should somehow lose the baggage and find someone worthy of trying again with.

Although should that happen it would be the perfect retribution. For her to sit on the sidelines as he found a new, true love. One that could give him the children that she was incapable of having.

Now THAT would be a REAL closing chapter. Her, inevitably alone, because her new romance truly IS doomed. Bitter because of her realisation that she really was horrible, faithless and barren, while she is the one who had broken her relationship with a man she loved and who loved her unconditionally. Just to see him recover and flourish, and be rewarded with children to carry on his legacy.

Now THAT would be a worthy sequel, especially if it were well written.