All Comments on 'Words'

Its a good one, and its well written. Words definitely have huge force and impact, for better or for worse.

What a load of Rubbish, unless you want to know how NOT to approach a situation that he faced, when the break up of a marriage is imminent.

The Husband was an egotistical loser, who thought he knew all the answers, when he is faced with the breakup of his marriage, to a woman that he loved and always would. Well let’s look at it from Winners and Losers, The Big Winner was ‘The Lover’ he walked away with the main prize, ‘The Beautiful Wife’ whom he loved, with a clear run at long and happy relationship, the only thing he suffered were a few meaningless insults and a sore finger. The Wife would eventually end up a winner [more of that later]. The big sorry Loser was the stupid husband, who at a moments notice, without prior knowledge of what was happening, blew up his marriage without any hope of reconciliation, without thinking it through, delay, plan, enact, when your ready should have been his mantra.

The wife would have an awful 12 months before her, the feeling of guilt, would weigh heavily. Her family would shun her, as would her friends, but James would be her strength, he would see her through the dark times, for regardless of what the husband assumed [Never assume anything in life] he wasn’t a few quick fucks and away kind of bloke, he did love her. Blood is thicker than water, especially parental blood, the bond would slowly see them slowly grow together again, true friends especially long-standing ones, would eventually rally around her. She would then lead a full and happy life with James, eventually forgetting the circumstances that brought them together, the husband would, apart from a few fleeting glimpses into her past, be almost forgotten.

When the door closes after they left and the husband walked back into an empty house, what he’d done hit home, he’d lost her totally, without a fight and without any chance of repairing the damage that he had inflicted on himself. Regardless of what he said, the first thing he did was open a drink, then it sank in, that the future held nothing, like he had said to her, he would never trust another woman. Then he started to cry, sobbing for hours on end, crying that would eventually subside but never totally disappear, that was his life from now on in, crying and drinking, he’d eventually lose his job and disappear into the gutter.

Helen1899 was right, he should have made her choose, I doubt she would have chosen her lover, that would have given him time, to think and plan. In the end he needn’t stay with her, but it would have been at his time and choosing, he could have got his head around it, there would be no tears or drunkenness, he would have learned to deal with it. There was even an outside chance that he could eventually forgive her and live happily ever after. Anything would be better than the ‘Hell’ that he had condemned himself to.

The Author, thought he was being clever, the story was well written, sadly badly thought out, in the instance the words killed the deliverer and not who they were aimed at. 1*

Quite a good story overall!! Cheating wife had no idea about how he would react!! MC did a great job of planting seeds of doubt in both the soon to be ex-wife and her lover and that will take a very long time to be forgotten if ever!! Her family will almost undoubtedly eventually forgive her but her relationship will never be the same!! At the same time it is questionable if lover boy will ever be fully accepted as part of the family!!

Read a comment from another reader who comes on as a militant feminist with a distorted opinion of her self worth!! Also this individual appears have a great deal of unwritten knowledge about the asshole lover. No where do we get any real discovery as to his character!! The only thing we do know for sure is that he is enough of an asshole that he takes up with other men’s wives!! Or maybe he/she was writing their own story???

A decent story that I didn't like too much. The decent story- in the writing.

For me, too much of the history written. Yes, some IS needed, but what's written is too much, The supposedly very good mediator falls short on either mediating the continuation of the story or forcing the ending. Yes, he did the latter, but after miles of talking, with the wife continually saying the same thing. He did, wonderfully so, break into the "it just happened" bullshit, describing how it didn't just happen.

>> Instead of him, much before kicking her & her lover out of the house, didn't force her movement; "If you want this marriage to have any chance of surviving, tell your boyfriend to leave now. Either that, or you're choosing him, so get the fuck out!" When she stays with the bf still talking, he kicks them both out. Yes, it happened, but after too much time.

>> He's presented with a fucked up situation. His wife wants to be shared, tho living with the husband the overwhelming amount of time, she wants to play wife with the boyfriend. Until the end, the husband stays relatively calm-- too calm. Bring them down with words? Yes, you can do that, but what man stays calm in that situation? By him doing so, she always felt she had the chance to get him to see her viewpoint.

>> The wife: a cheating, mind wasted bitch. She says she loves him, etc., but.... Even when told her lover's a worm & not the nice guy as he preys on, at least, this married woman, & will likely cheat on her, she stays with wanting the guy part time.

>> The boyfriend: a slimy bastard. The punch to the face was too good for him; should've been coupled with a shot or 2 to the balls.

>> Lissablissful below me suggests the husband's both an egotistical loser & an outright loser. OK, I'm mostly in agreement with the former (read her comment), but to write a total loser without giving the wife any way of reconciliation is as bullshit as the wife's "it just happened". She must be one of the women feminists that believe that being a man makes him wrong, The wife was told directly/ indirectly to ditch the boyfriend. She didn't. Worse, she kept on saying how this new lifestyle can & will work. What's to reconcile? Only a wimp would. Should he fight for her? After her words & actions, why? If she wanted that reconciliation, or any chance of it, she should've told the lover to leave. But then again, as the hubby wondered, she cheated for months behind his back (now THAT'S love & respect, I say sarcastically!) & would likely do it again without problem.

>> That commenter thinks they'd somehow would recapture their love if they stayed together & live happily ever after. In other words, she thinks the hubby should accept what she wants without recrimination, & their love would make them a couple again. As she wrote at the beginning, "what a load of rubbish". Won't happen; again, only a truly spineless wimp would even attempt that. She quotes Helen1899, agreeing that the husband should've made the wife choose. Indirectly, he did, telling her to lose the lover. She didn't, & kept on fighting to have both men. Comment faced & answered. Remember that the wife had an emotional affair before getting physical with the lover; SHE'S the one who broke the marriage, not the husband. And after the miles of discussion that went nowhere, SHE'S also the one that still wanted to be shared. Bob

>> In the end, the story was nicely written but the players were either totally fucked up or, in case of the husband, either somewhat weak or (more definitely) too calm to have the desired affect. Overall, only 3 stars.

Needs an epilogue.

As an aside, how is it that some people can be monstrously intelligent and write incredible stories that are tied together, with interesting people and great dialog, and then have this incredible blind spot in their lives where they cannot see the obvious signs of a Creator all around them? I just don't get it.

Very very well done. Great read.

I enjoyed this story, I don’t see how writing about the divorce or the reaction of her family would have added to it, after all, he had already told her what was going to happen.

There are a lot of American writers on here who write “ I could care less” or “ I could give a shit” when what they actually mean is “I COULDN’T care less’ or “I COULDN’T give a shit”.

A brilliant analysis of the liberal mentality of righteous self justification while simultaneously distancing themselves from any culpability of the damage they do.

What is with these pompous clowns that probably believe their words are gold? Few if any will do more than skip through the mess they left behind. They should just write an actual story rather than clutter up the comment section with looooong winded crap.

Thank you jezzaz for a very interesting tale. 5 stars

somewhere east of Omaha

Lost me half way through page 1.

VERY well written. Would love to see a Chap 2 or epilogue

Exorcism. Venting visceral anger at an outrageous act that most would be at a loss for thought and words that would be hard to wrap your mind around it. (Is this an example of Burn the Bitch?)

5 stars again - One of the better BURN THE BITCH stories on this website.

Well it's good he got to vent and punch the guy in the mouth ,boot him out the door and shock her.

Well done. Well written and emotionally devastated. He did not hold back and he shredded her delusional rationale. And now she has nothing. She killed their marriage and will reap the consequences. Sometimes it isn't just "good" people do bad things. Evil people.do bad things also. Obviously.

@lisablissful: are you for real or are you trolling? James is the big winner? James truly lives her? Lol. To even suggest the "new normal" means he gets off on the power play. The MC eviscerated that. Meanwhile the MC destroyed all her internal sophistries and self delusions. I don't disagree about blood being thicker than water, but sounds like her brother and probably her sister will think much worse of her, given her prior history. But so what? She has zilch in James and the MC bleeding that open. And what choice wad their to make on his part? She destroyed their marriage and tried to cover up thr murder with some vapid reasoning. There was no choice. No viable tactic or even reason to fight for his wife. She gave herself repeatedly and fully to another man in full deceit and premeditation. That is a clear statement that her subconscious wants out of the marriage. But who she chose is a snake and the MC blew away many of her self guided delusions. Seriously. Make her choose? Lol. He can move on and find someone or something else. She is a hollow wreck of the person he used to know and love. Ironically, I actually like a good reconciliation as much as the next guy when well written and heartfelt. This is clearly not amenable to any form of reconciliation unless the MC completely sublimates his ego and loses his soul. Not that their woukd be much of a marriage afterwards anyways. Circumstances, reasons, actions, and words, all matter. Ultimatums are nihilistic and lead to scorched earth. A BTB was the only realistic option here, though he used his unique skills to get cruel psychological revenge on a person he used to know very well. He admitted he is a nasty person when pushed into a corner. Ergo his nasty psychological warfare using "Words". For pity's sake read the title and the description. The author's intent was clear buy apparently some readers just completely missed the point. If you want to rewrite and RAAC this, then by all.means go ahead and post it. But that was never going to happen with the way the author wrote the main character.

Third time I've read this; it doesn't get old. Sure would like to see the actual fallout from this though. I suspect the MC will face assault charges as Kristi was a witness to James being punched out.

Let me start by saying I really enjoyed the story. It's true the right words can destroy another person just as easy as they can build someone up. And when those words are from someone you trust they are even more powerful.

This brings me to one fault I found in the story, a story about words and how they are used. In the story there is the sentence 'Again, hardly the right feeling to have any time, but I was so devastated that at that moment, I could have cared less', now my problem with this sentence is the last part 'I could have cared less', to me that means that the protagonist cared, he might not have cared a lot, he may have cared greatly, but he did care, the amount that he cared is just unknown, but he cared. It seems to be something that has crept into American English and I can't understand why, I mean you just need to add n't to the end of one word and you completely change the meaning to what I believe you were trying to communicate to the readers, by writing 'Again, hardly the right feeling to have any time, but I was so devastated that at that moment, I couldn't have cared less', you change the passage to mean that it was not possible for him to care less, he didn't care at all.

I end by saying I send this missive because I could care less, in fact I care enough about the English language to bring up this point, now if I couldn't care less I wouldn't have bothered.

This was a good story. After the setup of her not being able to have children I was expecting him to mention that he had gave up 11 years and the chance at children just to be with her. That would have really stung I’m sure.

Liberals have too much faith in humanity; conservatives have too much faith in God to intercede here on Earth. Between the two lies a narrow path of sanity, but it leans more to one side than another. This guy did a good job of getting rid of illusions however.

One of my favorites! The only quibble I have is that he should have crushed her for her barren womb. “Everyone we know was having kids. And here I am, wasting my time in a relationship with a genetic dead end! Do you know what I gave up for you? And this is my reward? Well, now see children in my future. I should thank you for that.” Still a 5/5 BRB

I've been lucky to use the concept of NEVER drinking when I'm sad, because life has taught me that doing so only takes a bad situation and allows the possibility of making it infinitely worse. Like crashing a car with a loss of life worse.

I readily enjoy being a DD for my friends and family, and that trust is more than enough to keep me driving sober...

Wow! Powerfully expressed emotional content.

Again for this great story. Perfect use of words only to completely destroy the cheaters. One of my top 5 all time favorites.

I have to comment on one of the comments here. I do pay attention and in general, I let most stuff go, but this… this really upset me.

“ The only quibble I have is that he should have crushed her for her barren womb.”

Dude. WTF?

The whole point of the story was to _take her to task for her active choices_. Her being barren is _not_ her fault - it’s no one’s fault, it just happens. And it sucks out loud when it does. Trying to make some feel guilty because their body doesn’t work quite right is just the lowest of the low. By this logic, we should all rip into people in wheel chairs, or people with spinabifida.

My wife is barren too. Should I just dump her ass because we couldn’t have kids biologically?

Having a pop at people who betray you because of their active choices is one thing. Making them feel shit because of things they can’t affect, that’s entirely another.

Sorry, but I couldn’t let that comment pass.

A rousing yarn without a doubt but I sure wouldn't want to meet this author at a time when I'm in a hurry and don't have time to talk! The first page and a half could have been mostly dispensed with as it added little of any value to the story but once the author got to the point it was a gripping read. It made such a refreshing change to read a MC making intelligent responses to his wife's deluded ramblings rather than the dim witted utterances of the brain dead husbands we are usually regaled with. A sequel dealing with the aftermath and the wife's fortunes going forward with the snake would certainly be a mouth watering prospect.

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While I appreciate the author's commendable ethos of not vilifying people for things about themselves over which they have no control I can't quite shake the feeling that it would have been legitimate for the MC to have highlighted the level of his wife's betrayal by reminding her that he sacrificed the possibility of becoming a father out of love for and loyalty to her and this was how she repaid him.

JR

@jezzaz wrote: “My wife is barren too. Should I just dump her ass because we couldn’t have kids biologically?”

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Not necessarily. However, if she betrays you, then it’s open season. Being fair is for people who treat you fairly. Betrayal warrants everything is on the table.

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When someone deliberately hurts you, then ALL ways to hurt them back should be explored. As others wrote, the MC in this story sacrificed above and beyond the normal cost of being a husband. The bitch then went below the standard of being a wife. That’s double betrayal!

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ZK