by PacoFear
A wonderful story and an excellent read, easily one of my favorites!
This is one of the best stories i ever read i keep reading it over and over again. plz keep writin. this story was so beautiful. cant wait to read more work from you keep up the good work. i love it
This was an awesome story. I had an idea there was no chip, but i was guessing "imu" meant "I'll marry you".
I knew what 'imu' meant the first time I saw it, and I'm a guy! Does that say something about me?
Great story, thoroughly enjoyed.
Great story. I got imu pretty much right away(maybe because of the title and such), as well as chip being fake.
It was fun sexy and sensual at the same time with all the bum massaging. Very well written. I'm pleasantly surprised. Thank you for sharing.
Great story. Couldn't read it all at once and each time I went away from it ... I couldn't get it out of my head. And I am happy to tell you that it still hasn't even after I finished it. So thank you.
Just wow. One of the most beautiful, romantic, and erotic stories I've ever read.
I love this story. It's not only erotic but heart warming too.
Any chance of telling us more....?
:-)
This is by far the best I've read, and masturbated to from chapter to chapter!
Kudos on a sensuous, erotic and heartfelt piece crafted by a master. The patience it takes to read your work is well worth it, and I look very forward to your next submission. Keep up the amazing work, and thank you! (Elizabeth and Richard were nice choices for names, as they have been associated with classic romance for time immemorial.) Credit also to your friend's "imu" concept. Brilliant!
I figured out the "imu" puzzle on the third or fourth time it popped up. That should be amended, though, with a fact that skin-writing is a favorite hobby of mine, and I've encountered that situation myself.
sorry bro... i figured out 'imu' even when u mentioned it for the 1st time... but truly, this is the AWESOMEst taboo i have ever read.... keep going :)
At first I thought it meant I Made U because it was always followed by breakfast. Then I thought it meant I Mean U as in he was Chip. Good story though
Hey i have to start out by saying that was the most amazing story ive ever read if society would allow red hot matter like this it would be the best movie. Umm please email me i really wanna start writing literotica. revaleedavid@yahoo.com
Great story! Artfully done. Building the sexual tension for more than a paragraph was very enjoyable. Yes, I got the Imu about half way through the story, but it was fun to have to guess. I imagine the younger the crowd reading the story, the more likely they are to get it, although I don't exactly fit that assumption. Bravo!
Almost as good of a love story as a sex story, well written definitely :)
Great story, very well written! I must say though I had my definite suspicions about the IMU the very first time you said it in the story. It was the only thing that made rational sense :)
Terrific work in any case, hope to see more like it someday!
My guess was "I Marry You." Not quite, huh? I don't think most of us guys are mentally equipped to puzzle out these sorts of things. Gals overanalyze everything by nature, which gives them a decisive advantage in stuff like this.
Aside from that... holy &#@%, what a beautiful story! You have a talent for mixing the romantic and the kinky in perfect proportions. Bravo! :)
I would love to direct a porn movie based on this story. It was very well constructed and had me captivated to the end. I would not use actors that look like they've been around the block numerous times. I'd need fairly clean looking stars that could convey the message you deliver without tats, piercings, etc.
Alas, that will never happen. From what I've seen, I guess there's no market for it.
I agree with the comment about making the movie, i was thinking the same thing, but with good clean actors not porn stars like he/she suggested. I think someone should give it a go at making a movie, it would be outtanding to be able to watch it. Also I am a 18 year old male and i got the IMU puzzle from the very beginning :)
I have been reading literotica for almost 2 years now, definatly one of the best ive seen.
Great story. I thought "imu" was "iwu". He got the "w" upside down and she was saying i want you. I guess I was off lol. Great writing, keep up the great work!
I always thought it was I Made You... Cause it was usually a food after imu. Like I made you pancakes...
I thought it was very well written compared to others :) i guessed what imy stood for right away by the way. Keep it up.
Amazing story. I agree with the person that said you should make this into a "clean" movie(12A). It's a very good storyline and some good characters, you should consider writing longer stories, and publishing maybe?? I think that you have a real talent.
Hugs and Kisses,
A.
i knew imu would turn out to be i love you in some way but i didn't get the heart shape of it till the end. great story. loved the length.
I had the "I" and "U" figured, but i thought might have meant "Miss" you had me fooled with it being a heart, though long this story completed quite sweetly.
It was gripping till the bitter end, well done.
but it was a master, flawless touch to the ending, that was the theme all along - thankfully Chip turned out to be a lie, because this way she truly was her brother's all along.
i fgured it out we she told him about the oatmeal. not that hard to see hom a heart can be mistaken for a m. but i remembered if the tail of the m isnt there and if you curl the legs inward then its shaped exactly like a heart. it might be weird that a 20 year old guy figured it out but i did
seriously,breathtaking !!!
excellent writing
you managed to keep it stimulating without becoming vulgar
I didn't figure out the "imu" thing though...
Well,i guess i'm just a shallow bastard
I absolutely loved the whole thing. You wrote it out perfectly and the "imu" was very tricky. I had no idea it was a heart. It was a beautiful story and thank you for taking out the time to write such a wonderful tale.
Truly biblical. This story is the most masterful work of art i have ever had the pleasure of reading. Truth be told, I have ejaculated multiple times through a mere single read of this story. Nothing shy of a miracle. Despite the obvious perversion andobscenity of this story it matters none. Fantastic. Well done
I really enjoyed your story. it was well thought out and masterfully written. I enjoyed your real world sense of realism. because like you i think those situations would have to be total accidents. or well thought out plans. I did actually figure out the imu but only because i had a treasure of adult but younger females who found it cut. so i had seen it mistaken before.
Had me gripped... I hadn't worked out the imu until I wrote it on the back of my hand myself, eyes closed, around page 5... it was so obvious then... see how you suck us in!
Thanks for writing...
I must be the second dumbest smart guy around, or the smartest dumb guy. Whatever. I didn't figure "imu" out. Perhaps because it was so simple...? Anyway, the story was masterfully told, and the tension was there until the end. I loved it! It is one of the best! Congratulations, well done!
had me masturbating with the closest objection afterwards! this story is more than amazing... if only i had an older brother!
This is the first time I rate a story with five stars, and also the first time I comment. It was a great read!
I actually knew the first time I saw that the m was a heart. Guess I'm smarter than lil' Richard there. But that was so well done that I had to comment, something I never do, on how amazing you are as a writer.
Great story! The characters and situations are real and believable and the sex is hot. I liked the unusual conceit of words on skin.
Very nice!
Lots of teasing, touching and cold winter nights skin to skin but we never had the courage.
Beautifully writen story: characterizations, pacing, tension and release (er, in the writing!). Personally, I think the anal sex is harder to swallow (there I go again); too over-the-top; but you made it sound almost believable. I want to read more of your work!
I didn't know the m was going to be a heart. There was a point when I was halfway through that I thought, "I'm going to be pissed if this doesn't get explained." Well done.
I did sort the "imu", but only because I had accidentally made that mistake years ago, with my then fiancee.
An excellent story, a beautiful chase scene and a wonderful ending. Great job.
Just wanted to tell you that I loved the story. I'm no writer but I can imagine that its hard for you to come up with a story without eventually getting credit for it.
Therefor my thanks to you.
PS: didnt figure out the IMU untill the ending
(sorry for the bad English if I had made any mistakes, I'm still learning)
Greetz, Dutch guy ;-P
was that last orgasm a g-spot? because he did have his fingers inside her and sometimes you can black out from those ....
didn't get what imu was til the very end, honestly this is amazing. Thank you
Loved it mate! I did work out the whole imu thing and i'm a bloke. I'll be checking out some more of more stories to see if they're as good as this one. 5 stars!
I thought she'd perposly left out a letter on the end. A "c" to be precise. IMUC= I make you cum. Lol seems real stupid now though....but that m thing was real smart! I'll try that at school to beat down my friends smartness ego....
wow. you made me think i am a pervert. Well written. i thought imu was "i am yours".. anyways, i ll be reading your other stories too. keep up the good writing buddy.
Wouldnt it be beautiful if it were true! Amazing story. Kept me on my feet!
You gave these characters life, breathed in deep detail and I absolutely adored it! I did not get the "imu" until the very end. When I began to imagine in my head the description given of Lizzie writing the letters over and over with the outer lines of the m longer, it suddenly made sense.
Really good. Just to let you know, I'm definitely about to 'favorite' this story.
Truly biblical. This story is the most masterful work of art i have ever had the pleasure of reading. Truth be told, I have ejaculated multiple times through a mere single read of this story. Nothing shy of a miracle. Despite the obvious perversion and obscenity of this story it matters none. Fantastic. Well done. Why must this be so vulgar and disgusting to the public?!?!
I knew the first time. Thought about it for a minute and turns out i was right. Nice story, loved the flow.
It was amazing :) I knew what it meant straight away & just to confirm it, I wrote it on my palm. Thank you for this beautiful story
I always thought bravo was meant for speeches & music, but this peace of erotica has to receive a bravo & an encore.
You are clearly a professional at this. You're story brought new waves of desire to me, and as i pleasured myself to your work, i constantly wanted more. You have written an excellent story and i look forward to reading more of your work
I get so tired of finding all these badly written stories written by people who can barely spell and their grammar is even worse. Then, they try to fit the entire story into one or two paragraphs and they're done. Spell check is available online... :)
That said, excellent work! You created a very "real" story by not adding any fantastic details like huge anatomy for either or both parties, as well as keeping the conversation casual and natural. Thanks for creating one of the better stories on this site, in any category.
It's a rare thing indeed to find a 'smut' story written as well as a mainstream one, but this is one of those rare gems.
Believable characters, believable situations and reactions and some beautifully touching details give it a sense of realism that is so lacking in the adult forum.
I realised what 'Imu' was shortly after it appeared, but happily watched it unfold slowly before the 'dumbest smart guy', with whom I both sympathised and emphasises, as the same thing is often said of me.
Loved the dog girl who has that delightful quality of feeling familiar, like someone you know.
Loved the story. Thank you so very much.
Without a doubt, the most well written erotica story I have ever read. Bravo to you sir, its amazing that a story I masturbated too could also have me break down in tear when the final bawoooo was uttered. You are a genius.
Super sexy story.......I figured out the 'imu' quite quickly and also that there was no Chip but I still enjoyed reading every word.
I figured out the IMU was I love about page three, and it was pretty clear that there was no chip for a while as well. It was well written and not ruched. A nice change of pace for normal erotica, keep doing what you do because you do it well.
P.s. I am a guy
I managed to figure out Imu as soon as it was first mentioned. But the fact that there was no Chip, well, I hadn't thought of that! Extremely Well written story, deserves to be No. 1 on Incest/Taboo!
Read this story once ages ago, and just rediscovered it, still amazing second time round!
hot, and emotional!
brilliantly written, will definitely be checking our your other submissions
I managed to get the 'm' at about page 4, realizing that a 'v' under it would make it a heart, and that... well, skin writing, kinda hard to feel where it starts and ends precisely, and I could see once he THOUGHT it was an m, he'd never think it could be something else... power of suggestion and all that.
I figured out there was no chip based on her "hunting". She needed bait to attract her prey. I was wrong about imu, i had it figured as an anagram, like she was saying "im with u".
good god this was an amazing story. funny, sad, extremely hot, and very cleaver
This story was incredible. You write fantasticly. I was stummped by the imu so there ya go lol. great job and keep writting. I look forward to reading more from you.
Stump me the whole time..great story and great writing enjoyed it fully
I thought imu ment I made u as something to eat always followed after it... I loved this story, I love your writing skills keep writing...
Im going to enjoy seducing my sister even more after reading this. And then riding and cumming along with her again in her love tunnel.
Very well written. You pulled me in from the beginning and held me there till the end.
I hope someday somebody loves me as much as she loves him. I have been known to be oblivious to the obvious when it comes relationships also.
I figured out the meaning of " i m u" very early on in the story. So, chalk one up for the men also.
I did catch on to the imu about the time it was explained about all his wrong guesses. Still I found the story well written and I enjoyed that their relationship wasn't just sexual but built on a real closeness. It make the story more believable and easier to enjoy. I saw the ending coming but i think that is the sign of a good story. I think a reader should get into the story enough, to understand and relate to a character/s enough to see how they would carry on. I find it is when writers try to trick the readers with a over-complicated ending that the writing suffers. So I commend the story and look forward to reading more.
The first time she did it, I wrote it out on my sheets with my finger. That combined with my thought that it could only be I heart you - as nothing else made sense. Meant I figured it out right away. Still, it made me smile each time she did it and I was so happy when he finally figured it out.
i thought it wasn't gonna be good cause its a really long story but was i wrong, your an excellent righter keep up the good work
'bout a year ago i started this and fell asleep half way through. not too long ago it came to me, about the i love you. when i found it, i enjoyed it even more. thanks for the ride and keep 'em comin
I had a lot of fun reading this story, and even the length of the story did nothing to dampen that fun! I found it very rich and imaginative, and I could easily visualize, thanks to your way with words. I can only hope to see more great stories like this one from you!
the best story i have read in a long time and i am surprised more people didnt figure it out
i read this very often, as well as many of your other stories read them all at least twice, every single one. besides the co-ed wife one. never read that. everything else, i read them alot , you're one of my fav authors here, if you think you have it in you, i would love a sequal to words on skin, it's close to my top fav of yours, you're amazing, Mr. pacofear
I was looking for a story like this to try and make sense of my own experiences. I recently made love with my brother for the first time (a few times) a few weeks ago... and I'm married. While I didn't seduce him, this was a wonderful story because it pretty accurately describes the life-long feelings we've always had for each other but never fully acknowledged. He's actually my step brother but we've always referred to each other as brother and sister. He's older by 3 years and the lovemaking felt just like the story read. Thank you so much. This is one more step on my way to making sense of the new feelings I have.
Wow this is a great story and I thought IMU was for I'll make you as in I'll make you waffles
That was one of the hottest stories I've read in a long time. I'm going to have to read the rest of your work now ;)
Rank's in my mind with litfan10's "The Deal" as some of the best writing I have read.