All Comments on 'Work From Home Pt. 01'

Good first story!

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There is a good reason you do not see a lot of second person stories. They, like this one, just do not work.

Just say no to second person.

Started to comment on the second person and saw 2 comments saying the exact thing I wanted to say. So take it to heart on your next story. Maybe you'll have people actually read your story.

Another vote against second person. Only made it halfway through the first paragraph.

I HATE this "second person"?? dialog (or whatever you call "me telling you what you are doing") format. It sounds so artificial. If she doesn't know, without you telling her, she must be dead! I couldn't read more than a few paragraphs before I lost interest. 1 * for pissing me off!

I don't remember doing any of this!

Second person stories seldom work, yet you chose to introduce yourself writing one. Mistake.

Doesn't work for me.

I hate 2nd person POV stories….

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Where is the story?

Or will it be somewhere in the next 100 installments, posted in 3 week intervals?

My advice: post the story in one installment.

Don't write in second person.

I am not an English teacher so I can’t comment on the second person thing that has everyone riled up, I am just going to say that I thoroughly enjoyed your words and the story-it was very

different than the usual cuck muck that is being written these days. Hope to read more intriguing stories from you.

Dare

Second person some of person. Great first story filled with desire and anticipation. Pay no mind to critics who suffer their own importance. Pay more attention to actual critics that strive to make the stories better…and you a better teller of same. Also use your imagination when reading their comments. Imagine the person /commentators sitting on the toilet with a smile on their collective faces and 3 fingers up their asses. Write another. Thanks for sharing. P. S. the average story reader just wants an entertaining tale.

Nope, I didn't do anything you say I did in this garbage! 2nd person stories are always rubbish. Is it just because you wouldn't remember characters names?

You, you, you, you…. SUCK !!!

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Bad way to start with the 2nd p and insufficient descriptive tags, but there is potential to get better in the following parts. And ... don't pay attention to the useless comments that ask to not pay attention to the negative feedbacks, because most often they are the most useful.

Can’t read anything written in second person.

This is very close to one of my fantasies!!! Although wouldn't be my husband bending me over the desk

second person stories almost always suck

NO READ NO SCORE

I didn't like this one as much as the other part...