All Comments on 'Working Away Ch. 02'

I liked this and it is well written, perhaps slightly over-written. My personal preference would be for something a bit pacier, but that may just be me.

One thing I did like is the way you described their less than perfect bodies - flawed, but still sexy.

I hope you continue and develop it - I'm certainly interested to know what happens next.

Yummy! It was fun to read and quite arousing. I also liked the moment of realism when he was unable to climax (I had a lover like that once and it was frustrating at first until I realized it wasnt me, but him).

The only thing that really bothered me were your uses of elipses. Never use more or less than three.