All Comments on 'Young, Free and Single'

Good premise.

But sex is simply too automatic.

Needed teasing. When he was eating her pussy. When she was blowing him.

Needed dialog about how each was liking what was being done to him/her.

Needed directions as to how it could be improved.

Needed discussions about how close the one receiving the attentions was to cumming.

Nothing much with her breasts, except a bit in the beginning.

Nothing at all with her ass.

Why didn't she ask him if he ever thought about her when he jerked off? How often? When was the last time? What did he imagine?

What kind of porn did he/she watch?

Four stars.

Liked it ok not the best I'd read but by no means the worst. Perhaps a postmortem on relative performance just to wind up Hannah when Steve is being discussed . Just for laffs. 4 star's.

I do like the tone of your story telling