All Comments on 'Zach's Night Out Ch. 02'

One of the best stories I've read in a while, great story line, lots of sex. Keep up the great work!

Excellent story... well-written and very hot. One of the best in a long time.

You're still switching from first person to third person then back again.

It breaks the narrative.

Good story, love the sex scenes. Would like to see it continued. Maybe Kristen deserves a threesome with Vicky and Dave while Zack is away.

RedVix, you've got good appeal in your submissions I've read. Tighten this stuff up with some editing and I'm pretty sure you could secure those nifty little red H's next to each title.