All Comments on 'She was Right'

Another great story by one of my favorite authors. As always he invests a great deal of thought and ingenuity into the story line and plot. He completes the story, ties up any loose ends and leaves you feeling good for having taking the journey with him

...and it was an excellent read.

There were some unexpected typos that I don't recall seeing in your past works, but they didn't detract from the quality of the story much. Did you lose an editor or something? need any help there?

5* (as if there was any doubt) - easily.

To quote the movie Crocodile Dundee, "Good one, Skippy!" Enough said, it's a 5!

Lots of fun. Thanks for the ride. You plot, write, and give voice to characters so well. But (Yes, never start a sentence with "But." Thank you mom) what about the protagonist who doesn't have money, who isn't a brilliant strategic planner, who isn't assertive, who doesn't have rich, electronically well-heeled friends, and who doesn't have a bevy of willing women just waiting to jump his bones? Yes, long punch list but how about trying on for size an average guy who wants to keep his children and his sense of self? Would love to see you do it.

I enjoy your work very much.

In the Boston to Birmingham series, you wrote about a follow-up to the adopted young lady. I hope that is still in the offering.

,wrong., maybe, stupid....definitely.....TK U MLJ LV NV

Wowie ! Loved it.

On one somber note though , its a shame that certain Asshats in LW land have chased my # 2 author out of the category where this truly belongs ! Hopefully they will not bother your story in this hub with their tired old clichés .

Well , I honestly thought that I'd never say this , as it used to be a pet peeve of mine when others did it , but , you seriously need someone to at least beta read for you , only to point out the typos. ( I've been hanging around Sbrooks103x too long ! lol. That correct grammar bug has rubbed off on me ! Help !!! lol). Take Grandpam's offer ! Heck , I'll even give it a shot ( It would actually be a very great honor ).

But all technicalities aside , you are THE best pure storyteller this site has ever hosted.

Your stories are the on the same plain as Morgan Freemans voice ( think Shawshank Redemption ) in that it just flows so effortlessly , and your written words just transport me to a wonderful place where justice prevails . I know I can come off with some asinine comparisons , but its how my simple mind works.

Well I've rambled enough , but I sincerely thank you for sharing with us.

5 *'s

Very descriptive, good characterisation.

Pity that good writers like yourself are having to act as refugees from LW section.

Another great story by the author. Well done.

Honestly, don't have much to say, just that I loved the story.

This seems like an old story. Enjoyed it.

I Liked the way he handled the whole thing. Nothing Rash or endangering the Slut or his Daughters. In the end she was the Loser.

Where you post, you are 1 of the best authors on this site. I'll read anything you write. It's a shame that some authors have left here to post on other sites.

As always, this author rocks!

As usual from you Good Stuff. One of my favorite writers.

“he's going to cut off the money” – What does lover boy care about the money? Surely she isn’t funding their playtime?

How did she check the accounts if the computer was locked? Or did she call the banks?

“Be careful, now that you're about to be single, she's thinking all sorts of things." – Why wait for him to be single? He’s already stated that since she’s sleeping with other men that he retains the right to sleep with other women.

Just because he’s the only one paying for it doesn’t preclude her name from being on the house. Though, even if her name WAS on the house couldn’t stop him from having work done on it.

“We parted, knowing our relationship was forever changed” – I don’t really see it that way. He could have blind-sided him and have everything blow up in his face, instead he’s giving him a heads-up and is working him.

"You're really angry, aren't you?" – Well, duh! If the roles were reversed you’d already have his balls in a jar!

“He's got young children” – She should have thought of his “young children” before she started fucking him!

I loved the exchanges about the “carpets!”

“I sent them home with their mother” – I’m a little confused; isn’t the man cave in the main house? They trooped out to the “building,” I assume the “building” was the main house.

I knew the volunteering would lead to no good, there’s usually some wealthy horn dog looking for fresh pussy!

Why put money aside now? He’s already supporting the family, any other support payments won’t kick in until after the divorce.

“But you're wrong, Dad. She betrayed us just as much as she did you, and cheated us out a normal family.” – Great response! I’m so sick of these cheated on husbands who try to push the kids back to their mother.

“Charlie never offered to come.” – Shows how much she cares about the kids.

"I could marry the bank." – What does this mean?

I agree with Crkcppr re: grammar, what's weird is the first half seemed pretty good, it was the last few pages that I started noticing a lot of errors.

And glad I did

Well written and plotted. Different 'payback' than BTB stories. An odd choice of category, I guess most people recognise your name and will read your stories despite this (sic)

What he said !

Thanks for your time and quality work. I do wonder where other writers who do not use this site publish as Sol does not have many new stories.

I am a fan. To misquote an overused idiom - you could write the phone book and I would read it. There were a few typos but nothing that detracted from the story in any way. At least for me. Please keep sharing your work!! and thank you

Enjoyed the story .Thanks for the entertainment.

I'll follow you from LW to Romance ,Nonerotic , where ever you post.

Thanks again.

Mike from Texas

Fantastic and enjoyed it.

-V

Great read !!!!

As a rule of thumb, after reading the first few paragraphs I skip any story over 3 pages. In the years I've been reading Literotica, this is the 3rd or possibly 4th longer story I've read to the end.

The author clearly knows that there's a difference between "story that involves sex", and "minimal framework tying the sex scenes together".

Enjoyed the story. Never get tired of good people getting on with life and enjoying what it has to offer. Your stories are always well thought out and make for enjoyable reading and yes Karma can be a bitch. Keep writing.

. . . and loved it some more. Great story, well told. Don't mean to give you a swelled head, but I think that you are one of the best on the site, and you are truly one of my favorites. Thank you for your fine efforts. Take the rest of the day off.

I read most of your stories - regardless of length - and get pleasure from reading them. I won't read the following categories: Transsexuals & Crossdressers, BDSM, Group Sex, and NonConsent/Reluctance. I'm just not interested in those topics.

Keep on writing - Rock On !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ( I'm 70 years old - was 9 when Rock began)

Thank you for another wonderful well told story.

The idea of spending the time that they did with nine girls would scare me. Shanna came across as a truly spectacular young lady. Charlie was very disappointing.

great story as usual. thank you for your time and effort. I see sbrooks has shot his mouth off as usual and I am using your comment section to tee off on him. that is what my apology to you is for. I have read sbrooks' comments, thoughts and re-reading items after this story, q's last story, various other stories and after every chapter of DQS1's WWWM. After reading those diatribes I determined that he has both FI tattooed on his forehead and a case of diarrhea of the mouth. sbrooks is a pathetic loser who is jealous of the scores and stories by the best authors on this site. in the immortal words of mike and mike in the morning, sbrooks, just shut up. again, my sincere apologies q and please keep up the great work.

You did it again. Another real good story. I thought he made a big mistake when he took her back. She was simply a cheater and she proved it again and again. This story just proves that 'a cheater is a cheater is a cheater'. Thanks for another enjoyable tale.

But She was most certainly not right. Great story that was an almost effortless read. I thought you did a pretty nice job of including the daughters. Most authors just assume we know how important the kids are you made them essential.

The only fault I have is that his planning and tactics are impeccable. The only false start is his lapse of judgement preceding her second indiscretion. There is no second guessing. There is now way I could not look around until I found those cameras. He litterally bypasses human nature on a matter that had no vows attached.

Finally, tiny details like supervision with boys, cooking and swimming are things that not only most authors would omit but most readers would not concern themselves with either. You are obviously a parent or play one on TV. Sincerely, it is ridiculous how some couples and individuals go about the bussiness of parenting. Most would just send 'em to the pool. Crack a couple cold ones and fuck like bunnies.

To those who question a daughter with a life partner: times have changed, those people now have the opportunity to actually live a life instead of being confined to quaint stereotypes like "spinster" or "eccentric".

Finally in homage to the LW comments section I just have one last thing to say:

Anonymous- Total Cuck Shit.

*****

The best story I've read here in a long time!

I really enjoy your writing, and this one is no exception.

Thanks for sharing this story with us.

I look forward to seeing a new story by this author. You sire are an excellent storyteller that surprisingly plays a little loose with spelling/grammar in this story. It was noticeable and unexpected but didn't really take away from the story. How well the daughters were included was really good. Thanks.

... and I am truly grateful you are still up to form. I agree with you on the cesspool of personal agendas that has taken over LW. Your return has brightened up my day/week/New Year.

When his wife cheats with married men he's helping their wives pick up the pieces of their broken lives (which is very admirable, by the way), but when she gets engaged to a man he thinks is a decent sort, never makes any effort to warn the poor schnook that she's an unrepentant serial cheater. Same with the one who wasn't lucky enough to find out before he married her with a prenup that lets her screw him over?

an emotional connection to me.

Not up to some of your classics,but still a nice tale. It is interesting that you don't have charlie,like in many stories, reconcile with him,no scene of regret for what she did,she basically stays the same self centered bitch she was,unrepentant,which is different.

At least I put my Id on my comments so that anyone that doesn't care for them can reply to it.

For what it's worth, I don't think I have anything to be jealous of, scorewise, and WTF does "FI" mean?

Glad you're back writing, or at least releasing your work.

Most people commenting on agendas are so narrow minded as

to be dismissed!!! Keep up the good work!!

Extremely good read, nice pace, terrific ending, easy five stars.

I'm sorry that it appears the "A-Holes" chased you out of the LW category (where based on the ending this should of gone)

Your stories have always been first rate & I always look forward to a new one.

Thanks

The characters were a bit too pat if you will.....the woman just a bit too dumb for real life. Otherwise reasonably well written although a few grammatical errors stuck in my craw. Thanks for the effort. Better than the usual fare!

A very good read.

Good story here - excellent portrayal of a selfish narcissistic woman. Husband went above and beyond but was smart to ultimately upgrade. Five stars for sure!

Once again an excellent story told by an excellent writer.

enjoyed your tale thanks 5*

Tener un feliz año nuevo, viejo amigo! I always like your story...Five Stars always!

Tried to give you full five stars but it processed as three only . A cheating wife story that proved that Living a great life is the best revenge . Very well thought out and worth reading more than once . Can only imagine in old age where sex is now unimportant. The ex wife will be lonely and unfulfilled. Good work .

Given the starting premise that it was cheaper to keep her, why would she stick around after he began to treat her badly? She has plenty of grounds for filing for divorce herself once the husband starts getting passive and actively aggressive. Kicking a door in, taking her phone, etc... She leaves, cites his instability and gets all the goodies that his lawyer says she was going to get anyway. And perhaps more.

You write well but the story is incoherent.

maybe you shouldn't post in LW anymore. Too many with agendas over there. Doesn't matter were you post, I always look up new stories by known authors anyway. Always welcome a new one by this author. Never fails to please. Thanks for the entertainment. (signed ML) 5*

You're certainly one of my favorite writers. Everything was just perfect. Plotting, pacing, writing, all top of the line. I don't come to this category much, so props to Crkccpr for the hookup. I would have missed a good one. Full marks from me. Randi.

It was enjoyable following the extended journey through all the wrong turns and back steps. The premise was original and the story creative. Charlie was a sad and forlorn creature by the end, of her own doing. The rescue of the betrayed wives was empathetic and totally unexpected. I too loved the section dealing with floor coverings. I laughed at the double entendre of shag carpeting.

The hostile take over in LW is sad. That some of our better authors feel compelled to avoid it like the toxic wasteland it has become is sad. What started as a small sub-category has pushed everything else completely to the side (or as in this case out).

Thank you for the new submission. Thank you for the unique look into some troubled and entertaining lives.

qhml1 tried very hard indeed to shore up this story's weakest point. He labored hard and skillfully endow the justice facade as much substance as possible. Alas the divorce courts and current law of the land are far too warped to jibe with the fairly equitable outcome at conclusion. If only this fictional law code and practices in this story were actual reality.

The characters, however, were both diverse and impeccably sketched. The range from children to intimidated county muckety-muck, prospective girlfriends and of course grasping , scheming wife was both ambitious and awesome. I do have core qualms in area previously mentioned but when big picture is considered there is no hesitation to thank qhml1 for sharing.

What a slog. It felt like you were emotionlessly ticking off a list of "well people like this action, so I'll wrap that up in 3 sentences; people like this confrontation, so I'll tell people it happened but only write a small part of it..."

This TYPE of story has been done incredibly well, where characters are deeper than "got cheated on and then just did everything right." Where the tension and drama don't vanish almost instantly. Where people were interesting and had personality enough for rich interactions. Where wives were capable of deception while still having enough of a brain that readers didn't end up hating the main character for being lame enough to have fallen in love with them. Where you didn't constantly find yourself going "if he did that, she'd just have him arrested and claim violence...if he did that, she'd just file for divorce and figure either way she wins....if he did that, she could file for cruelty and no judge in the world would go against her..."

This can be done well. Or it can be seven pages of "and then this happened and she was too dumb to respond and then this happened and she was a complete nonactor and then this happened and I didn't know what to do with my story so she magically changed into a different person again..."

Always a good day when my hands down favorite author on this site has a new story. Thanks for the great read.

Now, any chance of a wrap up the Houge Chronicles?

Came across TCcT's Brain Stew today. Great example of a story that walks the tightrope of having a wife do something utterly despicable while still making her a human character, not a plot device caricature.

main character is too goody goody to be true, he knows too many "hotshots" that are falling over themselves to help him, he's too nicey nicey a real fuckin hero. what a guy! reminded me of a slimey used car salesman.

i just ended up thinking what a holier than thou wimpy rich asshole no wonder his dumb slutwife was cheating on him.

Different, and I really enjoyed it because of that.

I appreciate your story... And, it is apparent that I am not the only one that would like to see more of the Hogue Chrinicles...

Thanks for sharing.

Great little tale as always.

Very good story - enjoyed reading it!

Thank you for an entertaining story. The dialogue was smooth, realistic, and kept the plot moving. I raised two daughters and recognize that you did very well with Marissa and Darcy. It was strange that the wife kept her panties on for 14 years. Then didn't. Expanding a little more about her and why she changed is something I would want to see.

Two minor items that bothered me are; not naming the wife until page 2. Then calling her Charlie then later still Charlene. Eventually I figured it out. Second, there was more english errors than usual. Misspelled words, wrong words, letters in wrong positions in the sentence.

Overall, nothing detracts from this feel-good story. It was very nice😃.

AMerryman

I loved how consistent Charlie was. No sense changing her stripes when caught. The hypocritical statements and outbursts just could not be helped.

This category is perfect because Loving Wives state in the description "Married extra-marital fun: swinging, sharing, and more..." The overly broad description leaves room for swingers, cucks, and non-consequences stories by way of the term fun.

I loved the LW categories for a decade because of the many fine authors that posted in that category. Some of the best even wrote cuckish and "fun" stories at first. They later turned out the best stories on this site. Because they were in LW we serious minded readers wanted the other stuff to go away. At least give a warning. Well the moral police and trolls tried to purge that category from whatever type of story that they perceived as the wrong type of story. It became toxic and many authors stopped posting.

This category can provide a framework for the stories that have less graphic sex and a focus on something other than the erections that are gained through watching your wife do unspeakable acts to another man.

Five stars ***** Thank You for posting here!

A good well written entertaining story.

I am sorry I don't have a chimney in my head so I have nothing to spout my agendas out of. 5*

I usually don't look in the non erotic section but it was a lazy Sunday morning. I saw your story and was very pleased. I didn't realize that the loving wives had gotten bad but that does explain why the quality of the writing in it has gone down recently. I'll have to be more diligent in where the great writers post. FYI I also read your new book walking in heaven on amazon. Excellent book and I highly recommend it. Thanks for all your excellent effort

Five stars. Very well developed. I agree with you about LW.

As much as I enjoy the LW category, I found it was toxic to my health. I became too emotionally involved which triggered my colitis lol. Live and learn.

Whether the first affair he found out about was the first affair...

I mean she couldn't keep her legs closed long enough to get him to move back into the house proper... I just don't see how she could have managed to be faithful for nearly fourteen years (or however long the specific time frame was)...

"Seriously, Dad? It's Mom, what do you think happened?" - Nothing like having your children able to summarize up "Mom's a cheating slut" without them using the words.....

Of course, I'm also amazed how stupid she was... She told the first dick how her husband knew and how he should worry... And even after proving that she was right... She tried cheating again...? I guess she figured the ONLY mistake she'd made was trying to tell him and make him be ok with it... "Oh, You mean the cheating itself wasn't such a good idea...? Damn..."

I just finished re-reading it. Surprised myself, going back so soon after the first reading, but the yarn attracted me like a magnet. Second time through I could appreciate subtle nuances that escaped me the first time, and I'm sure I'll revisit it again and find more things to like about it.

The waffling in the relationship, which some readers might have been impatient with, served to humanize Jack and Charlie. People are like that, especially when they have mixed feelings about each other. In fact, all of your principal characters seemed very human, and well drawn. I have to place this on the same level as 'Surprising Reaction', 'Air Possum', and 'Terrible Taste', in terms of general interest and vivid characterization. So you don't need to apologize to me for it being a long story -- it has a lot of quality that you couldn't squeeze into a short one.

Once more I thank you for a very entertaining reading experience. Keep up the good work!

Hans

Dang, your stuff just keeps getting better. Five out of five. I almost didn't read this because of the category.

Very minor criticism. I would have liked some insight into the wife's original motivation to cheat and then cheat again.

Otherwise I would change nothing.

A fine entertaining story.

An interesting story, told with just the right amount of fantasy.

If that was Non-erotic, it sure was a surprise to me! Just enough sex to really keep

me interested, and not quite enough for a stroke story. Just Right. Whose been sleeping in my bed, "and (s)he's still here." GREAT ! SosayJay

in real life he would have been served and ejected from the house in days. and then raped in the divorce. the woman here is just a dumb cartoon. *

This fool is insane

I love your writing, it's always in the 99th percentile, not only for this site, but anywhere. I've probably commented on this story before, but I just had to add that this was a wonderful touch, near poetry, an instant classic line:

[in times past,] I would have been cuddling her...Now, I just sighed and turned right.

"Now, I just sighed and turned right", what a requiem for a relationship.

as always I enjoy your submissions.

I enjoy so many of your stories and, surprise surprise, find I am thoroughly enjoying yet another with this one. Well done. Well done.

I liked this story a lot, as I have almost all of Q's stories. No doubt this one is another

5 star effort. Thank you, Q.

I've read this a couple of times. Thoroughly enjoy it each time. This, along with a few others, is a favourite to read when I'm down. Never fails to get me back on even keel.

That in reality there are so many men and women out there that thinks it's okay to cheat? What is really sad is so many of them never think or care about the consequences. Not just to their spouse but the rest of the "total" family and friends and sometimes even at work. Of course there's also the one's that just don't care.

I know that I always thought that you get married and that's it. Forever! Too bad I'm one of those that found out the hard way. Seems she and her best friend thought that I wasn't good enough. Just because I'm one of those that works with my hands. But life goes on and I ended up on my feet!

Great Story ...

Keep on keeping on ...

I have yet to comment on your stories. But I have read many of them and enjoy your writing style immensely.. Your character development is outstanding. I can feel their pain as well as their Joy when Romance occurs in their lives. You have an outstanding Talent. Please keep submitting.

Mine that is.... I almost didn't read this story and actually put it off in favor of others. DANG!! what huge mistake that was. Great story, well told, and the minor grammaticals were easy to overlook.

Lol... The combat boots and gowns was a nice touch...

A story that has hall the qualifications to be a wonderful loving wife's story but is more PG than anything

one of my favourite scenarios, where the husband, although unaccepting "stays" for, in this case his kids. the interaction between spouses is intruiging in this situation and quite difficult to write well i would imagine. the unoriginalists "boilerplate rendering" is probably my favourite using this scenario but this ones a close second.

Very very well done. Sounds sappy for a 61 yr old male, but I do like a happy ending. Thank you

My first read of this one.Not too long.Some have no concept of how long it can take to develop characters in order to tell a good story.It seems like a lot of the complainers about story length just want a quick and dirty story or have a short attention span. Like I said my first read, but not my last.

Two miniscule nits:

empathize, not emphasize.

memento, not momento

Otherwise a very fine story, though a bit long.

Several times tear to my eye

You never surprise me. You always deliver a top rated story. Thanks!

Great story except this one part.... "She had found a life partner, and they had adopted two little girls"

Why not call it as it is? His daughter was a lesbo.

Fun ride. Not “transference.” Displacement with a soupçon of projection

I couldn't give the story 5 stars though, because the character of Charlie just seemed bizarre. She goes from a marriage that seemed great, according to the protagonist, to a serial cheater without explanation. So either the protagonist was an idiot, which he doesn't seem to be, and she'd been cheating prior to his discovery and getting away with it ... OR, she went through some kind of mental breakdown or personality change that was never explained.

As with the majority of your stories this was enjoyable. Fantasy Train the term life partner applies to all types of people in relationships, not just same sex. Look it up before you apply your own stereotypes and criticize.

from a terrific author. To me the overarching themes in your stories are love and respect comes to those who love and respect others. Thank you for sharing your work.

I have to agree with Q that this story really belongs in Loving Wives; it has all of the LW tropes (dumb, cheating wife, decent husband, mild btb and super hot new wife) just done so much better than almost anyone else does it. Instead of one paragraph describing meeting the billionaire captain of the Swedish bikini team (what? There's no such thing? Bummer.), we are treated to multiple half-hearted seduction attempts by good-hearted women and a determined conspiratorial seduction by a special forces goddess! The backdrop for all of this is the daughters and maintaining their lifestyle and safety as job one.

I also agree that the comments in LW have little to do with literary criticism and more to do with personal agendas and hobby horses. I have my own preferences and if a story pushes too many of my hot buttons, I stop reading it. If I don't finish reading due to content, I don't comment. If I can't finish due to writing issues, then I tend to give a critique- without inflicting my own beliefs on the other commenters.

Q is one of my favorite writers and I often comment (favorably, dude! Really!) on his stories. 5 stars. Thanks for writing. JPR