by bumpercars
Solid writing. Good use of narration switch. The fetishes are well inserted and the sex is easy to envision. I don't even have an impregnation fetish but I liked it a lot. The plot is just simple enough to not distract from the sex while still being interesting enough with a light twist.
I guess that was part of the point. Very fun story.
Yep, I wasn't aiming for dead seriousness with this one. I'm glad you liked it.
What a coincidence- I read "The Big Sleep" just yesterday. Fun, playful story, well executed and you nailed the hard boiled tone. Definitely Hammett on Wry :-)
Thank you for your compliments. I'm a fan of your stories as well.
Its not often that I find erotic stories with an interesting plot! This was very good, I enjoyed the whole Detective backdrop and I admit, it was nice seeing Samantha win in the end.
I'm glad you liked it. I had fun with the story here. I was aiming for a lot of the themes and tropes of film noir but about 50% less grim, and having Samantha solve the mystery seemed to fit with that.
Any chance of a sequel story? This was the most fun I've had reading something on the site in ages.
I'll see. I did have fun with this universe. Even if I don't get around to doing a sequel for this one, I do plan to continue writing, even if it goes slowly.
Great story! I thoroughly enjoyed it. Your detail was on point while maintaining character throughout. I am not much of a writer, but I have an idea that might be up your alley if you would like me to send it to you to write?
Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.
I'm always open to new ideas. I can't promise that I'll make it into a story, as not every idea makes it that far, but I'm willing to give it a try. Send it to me through the Send Feedback option or a comment if you want.
As a film noir fan, I loved it, but it needed more fog, a fat man with a hired gunsel, and maybe a 1937 Chrysler to be perfect. 5 stars.
NewOldGuy77.
I'll have to keep those elements in mind in case I do another chapter. I'm glad you enjoyed it even without them.
(Also, just so you know, my story "The Hard Kiss Goodnight" is a sequel to this one, although Literotica's series system doesn't recognize it as such.)
Film noir fun and an extra point for so many legitimate uses of the word "ravishment". Impregnation isn't a fetish I particularly enjoy but your writing is quality, your images vivid, the struggles real... though perhaps a little half-hearted. Easy 5 stars.
Altissimus,
Not everybody can struggle hard! :)
I'm glad you liked the story and the word choice. Thanks for reading.