All Comments on 'Accidental Exposure Planned by Kim'

Very poorly written, ridiculous idea to start with and don't you think ANY man would divorce that slut?

Divorce!

Obviously English isn’t your firs language but that doesn’t excuse this pathetic excuse for a story.

His legs are broken not the rest of his body. You won't convince me he couldn't manipulate the wheelchair on his own.

I think English is not your first language; but your story is interesting. I liked it. Your wife is unique and your marriage has a playfully intimate quality. Of course, this "could" be a made-up story; making my observations irrelevant.

Congratulations on your first story! Listen to feedback, learn from your mistakes, and keep improving!

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First, you need to learn how to write dialogue. This isn't a script where the actors need to quickly find their own lines.

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Second, this story would better fit in the Exhibitionist & Voyeur category.

What a ridiculous story. If he was able to sit in a wheelchair, he is able to propell himself around. Was he also mentally retarded in that he couldn't open his stupid mouth and actually say something!

A story with lots of provocative potential. Probably would have been better received if posted in fetish section. Seems like the ending was rushed, just as a host of possible avenues to follow were being raised. Keep at it!

Dialogue in prose does NOT use this form.

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Kim: "Sorry, I forgot to offer you something. What do you want? Coffee or Tea?"

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That's for scripts and text messages.

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Then Kim asked, "Sorry, I forgot to offer you something. What do you want? Coffee or Tea?"

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All you had to do was look in a book. How hard was that?

"...My legs are fine now. I gained my freedom to wear dress as soon as I started to walk. But still we used to talk about those days when we are in bed." ---

FTDS:

What I don't tell Kim about when we talk is the results of her invitation to my coworkers to come inside while leaving me nude on the couch turned out! After I returned to work both Anna and Karen continued to offer their services for massage therapy. They explained that they were intrigued by my response to their previous ministrations and desired to help me continue down my path to recovery. Of course I couldn't turn down their kindness and I figured that if Kim took the initiative to start the encounter, she couldn't say no to the continuation of it. Between Anna, Karen, and myself, our massage sessions always have a happy ending. — The End

The tag said "accidental exposure" which is false. There was nothing accidental about what Kim did to him, she is being vindictive because he was short with her earlier. While not her fault that he is in his current predicament, she could have played her hand with a bit more diplomacy. Considering that he stepped out into space 12 feet above the floor of an open tank, broke both legs, laid unconscious in the tank for who knows how long, probably had emergency surgery, happens to be a guy used to moving about and doing things for himself, and is now in wheelchair for up to two months. Cut the guy some slack. — TANSTAAFL

he never thought to use his hands to cover himself ? bad story

Excellent CFMN story! I can’t understand all the negative comments. It’s not like this is some literary magazine and you’re trying to score an award. I understood every bit of the wording and grammar.. I don’t come to literotica for grammatical excellence, perfect punctuation, etc. I read stories here for the erotic value, and this one gets a 5 in my book! I would’ve loved to be in his situation, sitting between the two coworkers while they massaged my thighs. Great story, more like it please!

Obviously, English is not your first language, so get an editor whose knowledgeable fo English. Then do what they tell you. You are making a good start, but you REALLY NEED an editor. Check with the website and they will help you.

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